Primal Curve. Feel free to laugh and mock. Posted by Sid Meier (Member # 6965) on :
*laughs*
*then mocks*
Posted by The Silverblue Sun (Member # 1630) on :
Sweet.
Posted by alluvion (Member # 7462) on :
Silver-blue,
You need a stronger connection between the lyrics and the music. I'd suggest opening strong with a feeling (establish what is to be said), lowering/pacing down for the mellow bits, with a rise in instrumentation/vocalization when the important bits of the lyrics are sung. (the vocals do sound good in the quiet contemmplative sense - but the lyrics don't quite mesh)
that being said, I'm neither a singer nor play guitar player, so this is a pretty raw opinion.
nice of you to give a link to listen to.
Posted by Primal Curve (Member # 3587) on :
Well, it doesn't suck as much as the tripe you posted before. If that's you singing, you should probably stick behind your instrument. Your voice is quite weak and uninspiring. It's like watching a student film about bologna- not very interesting. Trying to hide it by distorting it and adding lots of reverb doesn't help and ust akes your voice muddle too much with the music.
New Born Beaches - What the crap is up with the Ska bass line? Totally doesn't match the lyrics and the bassist never lets up. It's rediculous. Your lyrics are also nonsensical in a way that's neither interesting nor quirky. It's just kind of weird, actually.
Armor Armor - Way too much vocal distortion. The guitar is boring as hell. Learn to fiddle or pick some. Strumming chords over and over again is dull if the only instrument is the guitar. Also, learn to love the way your guitar sounds naturally. Too much distortion without any clean signal sounds like butt.
Hold Tight - The vocals are better in that you didn't distort them too much, however, you still can't sing worth crap. Your pitch is off in several places. Also, the bass line clashes with your chord strumming in several places. It's also non-stop bass action that's annoying. The drum machine also needs to go. It's still less annoying than the other songs, though.
Live Forward - Shows the lack of your vocal range. Right from the beginning, the song is too low for you. The guitar is also absolutely crap. That distortion is for soloing, not for strumming. You strum like that with that distortion and it sounds retarded. Maybe you shouldn't overuse your multi-effect pedal so much. Seriously, plug your crap right into the amp. Try that for awhile. Quit hiding your inability to play behind heavy distortion.
Posted by Telperion the Silver (Member # 6074) on :
I dig them. Rock on Thor!
Ok.. more in depth thoughts. I'm a classical singer who prefers to sing in choirs and the like. But I'm also a huge goth and punk fan. I've seen countless local bands go up on stage at Detroit's goth clubs, Labyrinth and City Club, and you guys could actually fit in there. Very moody and hip. While true your songs weren't performed with accuracy, I don't think that what you guys were going for exactly. Listening I could imagine hearing your music in an independent film, a goth house, or on the street in beautiful New Orleans. Ahh.. where is my wine glass?
And as one who has tried to form and keep a local band and choir together I can really appreciate your group's efforts. Keep it up and improve. Then hit a local stage.
[ June 17, 2005, 01:58 AM: Message edited by: Telperion the Silver ]
Posted by Lady Eruve (Member # 6883) on :
I think you guys could sing out a little more, and put some variation in your voices, so it doesn't sound monotonous. The synchronization needs to be a little tighter, too. (I realise some of that is echo, but it sounds more like people singing out of sync.) There's also a sound (I think it's an electronical drum/beat thing) that's kind of annoying, especially in beaches. I think Hold Tight was the best one, because it had more variation in it.
Good luck to your band! You have a ways to go, but I think you really have potential. Posted by TomDavidson (Member # 124) on :
Remind me never to tell PC to feel free to laugh and mock me.
Posted by Noemon (Member # 1115) on :
I don't think that he actually requires an invitation, Tom.
Posted by The Silverblue Sun (Member # 1630) on :
Thanks for the feed back, y'all I really appreciate it.
Even yours, Primal Curve, Hatrack's Simon Cowell. You're kind of like an angry music teacher who doesn't like me. There is truth in all your critiques, and you try to pour a little salt on the blade to make it go down with a bit of a sting.
Thank you Alluvion, we are trying to work on making everything better, and I know we have a long, long way to go.
Teleperion, thank you very much, thank you. We are going to keep working on the stuff, find us a good drummer, and hit a local stage.
Lady, thank you. We will continue to try to correct our many mistakes.
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