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Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

I think that I shall never see ‘round here
A poem surpassing Sara’s … love of beer.
But we shall try a sonnet as she ask’d
Although this rhyme scheme’s already gone flat.

You see, I’m more a free verse kind of guy
And rhyming couplets make me really ill
I bet you think I should’ve just said “cry”
But that sing-song crap is poetic swill.

Which brings us back to Canadian beer
And Sara’s fondness for all things Canuk.
I wish other MD’s were as sincere
As she is when she says “Good Bye, Good Luck.”

She plans to leave us, don’t you know it’s true
It galls us like some foul and bitter brew.

Posted by Irami Osei-Frimpong (Member # 2229) on :

[Smile]

Posted by Sara Sasse (Member # 6804) on :

[Big Grin]

*hands clapping

[Kiss]

Posted by twinky (Member # 693) on :

[Cool]

Posted by Intelligence3 (Member # 6944) on :

/applause

But what's this about Sara leaving?

Posted by Sara Sasse (Member # 6804) on :

I am moving to Canada with my husband come next fall, secondary to a whole host of reasons.

No anticipated changes in my Hatrack life. [Smile]

Posted by Sara Sasse (Member # 6804) on :

Bob, that's great. I'm glad you wrote Dana one too, but I cherish mine extra-special.

Yours will go up next to Chris Bridges' on my desk workboard for inspiration. [Smile]

Posted by Intelligence3 (Member # 6944) on :

Okie. Thought I'd missed sommat.

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

Sara, I'm honored!

[Hat]

Posted by Katarain (Member # 6659) on :

Lovely poem. [Smile]

As an additional challenge, why don't you try to make it 10 syllables per line, in iambic pentameter? [Smile]

Then it shall be a true sonnet to make Shakespeare jealous. [Smile]

Picked this up from wikipedia:

da-DUM da-DUM da-DUM da-DUM da-DUM
(weak STRONG / weak STRONG / weak STRONG / weak STRONG / weak STRONG)
Was-THIS the-FACE that-LAUNCH'D a-THOU sand-SHIPS

I had my students try to write a sonnet once. It was very hard!!

Have fun in Canada, Sara. [Smile]

Since you'll still be here just as much, I don't have to say goodbye. [Smile]

-Katarain

Posted by dkw (Member # 3264) on :

*snicker* It is ten syllables per line. But it's only iambic if you really force it. (Which I think was partly the point.)

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

[Big Grin]

dkw beat me to it! [Big Grin]

Yes, TRY to read this thing as if it were in iambic pentameter. It's loverly!

[Big Grin]

[ November 13, 2004, 01:47 PM: Message edited by: Bob_Scopatz ]

Posted by Katarain (Member # 6659) on :

But... but.. some of the lines are shorter!! hehe..

Okay okay. I admit it. I didn't count. [Smile]

I just... looked.

Lovely SONNET, then. [Smile]

-Katarain

Posted by Dagonee (Member # 5818) on :

Ack! Iambic pentameter is not about syllables - it's about patterns of stress!

An iamb is a foot with a short syllable and a long syllable, or an unstressed and a stressed syllable, in that order. Pentameter means there are 5 feet per line. Yes, this means a line of imabic pentameter with no exceptions will have 10 syllables.

There are many exceptions that do not take a line out of iambic pentameter. Sometimes an unstressed syllable can be removed, which will tend to suggest a pause or cesura in that spot. There are others.

But, when thinking of meter, think in feet, not syllables. 5 iambs, not 10 syllables.

Dagonee

Posted by dkw (Member # 3264) on :

[ROFL]

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

Sheesh! Dagonee... Just go with it. Think of it as iambic if the person was walking with a burr in their shoe.

I never claimed it WAS iambic pentameter. It's part of the fun...

Sheesh!

By the way, Dag, thanks.

[ November 13, 2004, 02:52 PM: Message edited by: Bob_Scopatz ]

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

Here are the rules of the sonnet.

I violated most of them.

Posted by Dagonee (Member # 5818) on :

I wasn't commenting on the poem. I like the poem. [Smile]

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

[Big Grin]