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Posted by Tinros (Member # 8328) on :

I was feeling really lonely last night, so I wrote a poem, and I'd like to know what you guys think.

Stumbling through the forest,
Cold and all alone,
You stare up at the bright full moon,
And release your anguished moan.

Though you only wish to relieve your pain,
Your howl chills humans’ hearts.
They tremble in terror at your sound,
And set you forever apart.

I understand your pain, lone wolf,
I understand your sorrow.
I understand your struggles;
Your today is my tomorrow.

You look upon the other packs,
The small cubs with their mothers,
And your lonely heart within you pines:
You’ve been rejected by those others.

We share a lot, wolf, you and I,
Your howl is like my tears.
And as I walk through my own world,
I experience your same fears.

I understand your pain, lone wolf,
I understand your sorrow.
I understand your struggles;
Your today is my tomorrow.

We both walk lonely through our lives,
Praying for a friend,
But no companions stay by us,
And all our friendships end.

We share a kindred spirit, wolf,
We understand each other.
So I shall be your sister, wolf,
If you will be my brother.

You understand my pain, lone wolf,
You understand my sorrow.
But you fill me with hope, lone wolf,
That there will be a better tomorrow.

For even as you struggle, wolf,
You continue to survive,
And even in your anguished heart,
Your spirit remains alive.

We understand our pain, lone wolf,
We understand our sorrow.
But our spirits from afar strengthen each other,
So we can make a better tomorrow.

I will stay by your side, lone wolf,
I will soothe your pain.
I know you will do the same for me,
Should the need arise again.

We will find happiness, lone wolf,
We will find peace some day.
And in my heart, forever, wolf,
Your eternal friendship will stay.

Posted by SteveRogers (Member # 7130) on :

It's good, I think. But I'm having difficulty reading it without an acoustic guitar and a Country/Western singer in the background.

Posted by MightyCow (Member # 9253) on :

It's not as bad as all that. At least the ranchers aren't trying to poison you [Wink]

I'd recommend some loud music and stupid dancing, followed by getting outside in the sun and having a good time. [Smile]