As he scrambled down the parkway, he considered. Maybe tomorrow he could stash the Famed Spearman costume into his backpack. It took all his allowance, but it would be worth every leaf raked. Joey could become the defender of the weak and downtrodden. Like that brainy kid who got himself beaten up by saying, "May you go first on double Jeopardy."

Then again, without Quantum powers…
Joey fumbled the key. Day after day, he had opened the door without thinking. However, today, he was too anxious to get inside. He steadied his hand, took a breath, and then unlocked the door. Inside, an empty apartment, his parents still at work. The clock on the alabaster wall read 2:57. Three minutes.
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This is very new, off the cuff, so tear in.

I don't have much after this I'm trying to figure how to approach this. It's a spinoff idea from my main WIP, a short story, the idea of which I've just thought of today.

Then again, maybe my idea for a story is not such a good one. I'm thinking the first part is Joey, who awaits for the upcoming live-action movie, watches a talk show. During this the talk show host interviews a man, a minister who is leading a boycot of the Famed Spearman.

Afterwards, at the end, the story cuts away to the minister, watching himself on TV. His reactions, and hopefully, a suprise ending...

Reading a story about watching TV... I'm not sure how if I can approach it in a way to make it work.
 

You might want to make the whole "Famed Spearman" thing a bit clearer from the outset. One problem is that it doesn't really sound much like a superhero's name. Also, making it clear that this kid's worldview is heavily influenced by his devotion to The Famed Spearman (really, you might want to think up a better name) would illuminate the action of the first couple of paragraphs much better.

There were a couple of minor wording issues as well. Things like "that one in the stomach with a stick..." "Like that brainy kid who got himself beaten up by saying," "However, today, he was" were a little bit ragged.

The important thing to remember about story ideas...they don't really matter. It is more important that the reader enjoy reading about the character.
 

And what are quantum powers, doesn't quantum mean really really tiny? Like about the smallest you can get?

As far as story telling, some of the sentences are ambiguous like : the alabaster wall, what do you mean? Is it really alabaster or alabaster colours or what, and like the empty apartment, I thought you meant it had no furniture or anything.

Is it normal for kids to get home before 3pm, in Australia, the don't get out of school until 3pm.

The kid seems fun though, like Calvin, in Calvin and Hobbs.

 

The Famed Spearman is a play on the name Roger, which means something like Famed Spearman. It's a fictitious Robin Hood like superhero that children watch on TV in my main WIP. Joey is a character that appears for a few chapters, but I was thinking of experimenting, a writing a few short stories based on him to see what came of it.

Plus I wanted to play with the idea of a superhero, which in the story, actaully has some basis in 'reality', based on a 'real' person who tried to make a difference, but failed. But his story was embellished and then became an controversial underground comic book... and then decaded later into a thriving industry. At last, a live action movie is being made.

<And what are quantum powers, doesn't quantum mean really really tiny? Like about the smallest you can get?>

In the comic books and cartoons, the Famed Spearman is said to have Quantum powers. That is he perform ascpects of quantum mechanics that normally do not occur on a macroscopic scale. Primarilly, quantum tunneling.

But of course, the 'real' Famed Spearman did not actaully have 'Quantum Powers'.

<Is it normal for kids to get home before 3pm, in Australia, the don't get out of school until 3pm.>

Depends what grade thier in. In elementary and middle school they might. Of course in the US it varies even from state to state.
 

Survivor,

I do believe of course the character matters... but on the other hand I don't believe story ideas don't matter at all.

Usually I'll pick up a book based on a good synopsis, a creative twist of some sort. Of course, once I get the book home, the character may matter a bit more in completing the book.
 

From Joey's POV, he's a bad guy. He wants to lead a boycott against his favorite superhero. He stirs up controversy where there is none.

But at the end, we learn the real reason for him stirring up the controversy.

The minister is a good guy wrapped in a bad guy wrapped in a good guy.
 

I too was thrown off by the Famed Spearman, not knowing who he is. Maybe you want to make it clearer. Also, I immidiately associate superhero costumes with capes and masks, despite the "spearman" reference. Maybe you want to put in some description to avoid that, or maybe I should just work on getting rid of steryotypes in my head.