Hatrack River Writers Workshop: Apocalyptic Iterations

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Posted by Shi Magadan (Member # 2260) on :

497 Word, SF story, any and all critiques welcome

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The end is near, it always is, I see it constantly.

So, why do I bother? A puff of air here, a kind word there, a little white lie, and once again I’ve saved the world. But it always comes back, someone always does something stupid -- not that they understand what they did -- but they do it, and lo and behold, I see the end again. And once again, the world needs saving.

Just the other day, I was standing at the corner of Michigan Ave and Clarence Drive, enjoying an ice cream sandwich. I was drawn to this corner, the most urgent local fulcrum, it’s a feeling that I get, it sucks me in, irresistible, like the smell of freshly backed bread when you haven’t eaten in days.
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Posted by Ryan Brotman (Member # 2360) on :

I like what you have here. Has a sort of noir/slueth type feel to it. You build a voice of confidence, annoyance, and resignation within these few lines and it works well. I'd like to read more.

Posted by HSO (Member # 2056) on :

This looks good. I'll read it. Send it on.

Posted by Jeraliey (Member # 2147) on :

I'm hooked. Can I read it?

Posted by Shi Magadan (Member # 2260) on :

Thanks. On its way.

Posted by Keeley (Member # 2088) on :

I'll read.