I know that we rarely look at poetry, but I would greatly appreciate some feedback on a work I've done recently. The thing as a whole is ~20 lines, so I'll just give the first one. The work also contains a few swearwords, but nothing done for self-indulgent reasons; the swearwords are there because they need to be, in my honest opinion as the creator.
If you are interested, please inform me, and I shall email the entirety to you.
Thank you.
quote: Summer is sick, and it hacks up a stench
[This message has been edited by Phanto (edited May 29, 2005).]
Posted by Robyn_Hood (Member # 2083) on :
I always enjoy a bit of poetry, send it over if you like.
Posted by ParanoidRook on :
As do I, email away :)
Posted by mikemunsil (Member # 2109) on :
please send
Posted by Void (Member # 2567) on :
Just wanted to let you know that your first line is very effective! I read that as summer being a season, not someone or some thing's name, yes?
Posted by Phanto (Member # 1619) on :
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