This is topic Eulogy in forum Fragments and Feedback for Short Works at Hatrack River Writers Workshop.


To visit this topic, use this URL:
http://www.hatrack.com/ubb/writers/ultimatebb.php?ubb=get_topic;f=11;t=001038

Posted by Robyn_Hood (Member # 2083) on :
 
I'm looking to get some feedback on this piece. It is a flash piece from one of the challenges at Liberty Hall.

Eulogy
425 words
---------------------
The first thing Kimberly ever said to me was, “Someday I’m going to fly.”

We were both six at the time. I had just moved to town and didn’t know anyone. Shy and scared, I stood alone at recess, watching the other kids laughing and playing. Then this fiery little red-head walked up to me and declared she was going to fly! She grabbed my hand and dragged me over to the swings so I could give her a push.
 


Posted by Dude (Member # 1957) on :
 
It's pretty short. I'll read it. Send to fsilv01s@uis.edu. When you send it, let me know how in depth a critique you want.
 


Copyright © 2008 Hatrack River Enterprises Inc. All rights reserved.
Reproduction in whole or in part without permission is prohibited.


Powered by Infopop Corporation
UBB.classic™ 6.7.2