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In 1989, a San Francisco Bay Area earthquake made national news by forestalling game two of the World Series. A less publicized consequence of this shaking earth was a ripple in the housing market, and the softened prices allowed the two Lee family factions to sally forth from their respective apartments and buy houses. The plenary Lee holdings then included five children, four parents, three convenience stores, and two new houses within a four block radius in Richmond, California. The houses were on different streets, Asford St. and Maple St. The Asford St. Lee's were comprised of children, Jennifer and David, and parents Seung and Moon, and the Maple St. Lees contained three children: Shubert, Vivian, and Doris, and parents Bae and Jin.
Chapter 4
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Claymore's degradation began when he stopped hurdling. Degradation is a loaded term, and while all of the witnesses and Claymore himself considered it degradation, in the long view of history, a sympathetic auditor could reasonably call Claymore's ordeal a painful transformation. Claymore’s father, Derrick, blamed Claymore's fall on biology, weak genetics expressed through his mother’s line. Two of Sarah’s brothers had entered college of sound mind and left school with pronounced schizophrenia, leading Sarah to scrutinize Claymore's every behavior upon her son's first visits home from college.
I'm cruising along at a good clip, and I wonder if someone wouldn't mind reading the first three chapters. Or at least give feedback on these snippets.
Note from Kathleen:
It's okay to post 13 lines per chapter, especially if the chapters are long (like short stories), but there should still only be 13 lines per chapter. We're talking about Fair Use limits here.
Note from Tanglier:
I'm working on degraded word processing program and I'm not quite knowledgeable enough to discern 13 lines. Sorry for the inconvenience.
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If this is a textbook, this is a good thing. Otherwise...
Nothing of interest there to me at all.
Still, too much summary. Let the story stretch its legs.
Here is what I'm going to do, finish writing the book as it comes, then do a massive rewrite.
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