Hi, everyone! My name is Wa Agya “Kelly” IyIMeeMe, and I am an alien boy living on the world Acca. Acca is one of many life-bearing worlds of the Senuv Galaxy many trillions of light years from the Milky Way Galaxy where I used to live as a Human on the planet Earth.
The Senuv Galaxy is a barred galaxy with many blue, yellow, green, and white suns and lots of quasars, thus giving the galaxy a green-blue appearance when seen from space. In one of the arms of this galaxy resides Acca, a
(can I please have feedback on this? This is the prologue. Thanks.)
Posted by nitewriter (Member # 3214) on :
You might consdier skipping the "hi everyone" at the beginning -just go right into the prologue. Is this a story for kids? I got that impression but just not sure. Also - the color of the suns you mention = I've never heard of a green sun, was this intentional or oversight? What is a "barred" galaxy? (spiral galaxy?)
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Posted by KellySt (Member # 5505) on :
The Debra Ann Experience is a series of fiction stories about the life of a disturbed child named Debra Ann Smithson ranging from Debbie's birth to mid-40's, and it is intended for parents, teachers, psychiatrists, etc. who might come into contact with a person such as Debra Ann. The green suns are intentional, and the Senuv galaxy can be called a spiral galaxy. Wa Agya IyIMeeMe is a young male student who is enrolled in "Abnormal Psychology of the Human Being 101" a class at the Academy of Science. If you would like to read the whole first part of the series (it runs at about 30 single-spaced pages when printed on both sides of the paper), I can email it to you. But if I do this, will I lose my electronic rights? Please reply. Thank you very much.
Posted by Kathleen Dalton Woodbury (Member # 59) on :
If you email a story to someone, that's like sending them a letter, neither email or letter-writing is considered publishing.
You use up your electronic rights when you publish your story electronically, and one of the ways to publish a story electronically is to post the whole thing on a website.
So if someone here asks you to email your story to them, you can do that without worrying about using up your electronic publication rights.