Hagen lifted his head as the saltreach flowed past him, and the flame dancing above his palm dissipated. He felt the change that brought nullification to their Tell-an powers, both his and the second mage. The other would know that he was here. This would be the end of things.
Hagen stood up from his seat beneath the large, oak tree and scanned down the slope. Tall, dark grasses covered the low hills as they reached out to the east -- away from the mountain slopes behind him -- spotted with broad-leafed trees. A figure clothed in deep blue made his way up the incline toward Hagen. It would be Marek. Hagen’s pulse quickened.
The voice of his Shari-a, Falor, came from its place within him, silent to all but his mind. “Be patient, Hagen. Do not let
Hagen lifted his head as the saltreach flowed past him, and the flame dancing above his palm dissipated. He felt the change what change? that brought nullification to their Tell-an powers er... are you trying to say that their powers vanished?, both his and the second mage"second mage's"--and what second mage? The one standing next to him? Second by what or whose ordination?. The other what other? the other mage? would know that he was here. This would be the end of things.er... the end of the world? End of the status quo?
Hagen stood up from his seat beneath the large, oak tree and scanned down the slope. Tall, dark grasses covered the low hills as they reached out to the east -- away from the mountain slopes behind him -- spotted with broad-leafed trees. A figure clothed in deep blue made his way up the incline toward Hagen. It would be Marek. Hagen’s pulse quickened.
The voice of his Shari-a, Falor, came from its place within him, silent to all but his mind. “Be patient, Hagen. Do not let
This piece feels inaccessible to me, but that's not uncommon for high fantasy. The end of things is a bit too general for me to care much about. At least there is another person approaching, and that might make me turn the page to see what their interaction is like.
I'd be interested in reading once it's finished.