This is topic His and Hers: Two accounts of a New York Wedding(Historical fiction 800word) in forum Fragments and Feedback for Short Works at Hatrack River Writers Workshop.
This is hopefully a funny flash, I intend on submitting to AlienSkin. I am looking for a quick crit and line edits on this short piece so I can lick stamp, and send this one on it's way. I was beating myself up, because I accidentally didn't save my 7k draft of my WOTF entry and used this humourous bit to pull myself out of a funk.
She was like a dream, a vision. Upon first glance, I was stricken with love. She seemed to appear from nowhere. The ball was the first social event I attended after arriving from England. None of my associates seemed to know of her history. “New money, perhaps,” they told me. It mattered not to me. She commanded the room, like royalty. Our wedding was elaborate to say the least. She claimed to have no family, but her inheritance seemed infinite. Not many on the guest list were hers, but those in attendance consisted of every prominent person, I knew. It was the talk of New York City. The most talked about wedding of 1855. On our honeymoon, we travelled down the mighty Mississippi on a steam ferry. We watched a magic show before
Posted by Tiergan (Member # 7852) on :
I got time. Send it my way if you want.
Posted by Toby Western (Member # 7841) on :
I'd be happy to look it over!
Posted by Bent Tree (Member # 7777) on :
Thank you guys. This one is in the mail, thanks to your valuable critiques.