Congrats but would you mind some criticism? I just read a couple of pages from the sample--it seemed a looong sample--but there was a couple of things that stood out.

Overall it seemed intriguing, I wouldn't mind buying it but at the same time as I said a couple of things stood out.
 

When you set it up they allow one to set sampling size.

I had it at 10 % but decided to increase it to 20%.

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However I do think, from reading only up to the point where your MC's gift reanimated the guy with the arrow in him, and a little of their talk.

Nice way to get some info in outside of an info dump but at the same time I felt like it went by kinda quickly. I think I know part of the reason. The opening isn't bad but there isn't any descriptions. Are they in a forest as I imagined since she just came upon the body, or a high grass area? Or just dirt with small hills that would block her view until she came around them? What is she wearing? or the body? I thought he might be rich but maybe more like a merchant class because of his attitude toward his money.

Not that you need to go into complete detail down to socks and underwear. Just some basic outlines. The reader can supply some of the description from their imagination but a couple of points would be helpful. You don't want your readers to work too hard. Sometimes it can be a bit tricky to add a comment about your MC's outfit without sounding trite or too wordy but it can be done.

Some of the five senses also would be good, You have some obviously but one pro writer uses every five sense every two pages. I'm not saying you have to do that but a few of the senses here and there more could make a difference.

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