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Posted by LordPoochie (Member # 6174) on :
 
Here are the first 13 lines of a novel I'm working on. Thus far it's at about 10,000 words (51 pages in double-spaced 12-pt Courier). If anyone is interested I can send them the first two chapters (twenty pages).

It's science fiction set in the near future, and follows the story of the first person ever to be born in another solar system. For ten years only three human beings exist on the moon Anima - the protagonist, Tammas, and his parents. Anima was thought to be filled with life - hence the name. Yet its inhabitants have so far found only a desolate wasteland. When other humans finally begin arriving, they struggle to survive and build a community while searching for signs of life.


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The world entered Tammas through his nostrils, flooding his small body with the bitter alien atmosphere. It seethed down his spine to his curled toes. One, his mind screamed. Two. His nails bit into his palm beneath a pair of absurdly large grey gloves as he counted. At fifteen seconds, lemon juice was bubbling down his veins. At twenty-five, he was on his knees. He waited until his instincts waged war against him; then he counted five more seconds. When the fortieth ticked in his mind, he replaced his helmet and with two twists locked it into place, restoring the flow of earth air to his brain. His breaths came quick and ragged, making music with his pulse. After a while warmth returned to his body and the buzzing in his head subsided. Tammas opened his eyes.
 


Posted by LordPoochie (Member # 6174) on :
 
Just to clear up any possible confusion, Tammas is *not* dreaming here, as would be made clear by the fourteenth line.
 
Posted by debhoag (Member # 5493) on :
 
might be later in the week, but I could do 20 pages for you.
 
Posted by LordPoochie (Member # 6174) on :
 
Okay Deb, I'll send it your way in a few days then. It'll give me a chance to touch it up a bit first.
 
Posted by chinchillac (Member # 6185) on :
 
Okay, I like the beginning of this. At first, I thought it was a dream, but it sorts h itself out. I would be interested to find out just why he took off his helmot and tried to breath an atmosphere that did not have oxyogen in it.
Chastity
 


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