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LucyintheSky
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If I had known that asking a simple favor was going to cause so much havoc, I never would have rubbed that damn lamp.
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Just as English has no word for the back of the knee, Centauran lacks the basic concept of "get the hell out of my face or I'll break both your antennae."
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Mike spent the first half hour of history class surreptitiously slashing his wrists, just to see how fast his new skin healed.
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The pack members welcomed me with a cordial sniff and grazing of pelts, all but the b*st*rd who bit me.
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Finally our captivity was over when our host died and thieves removed the gold tooth containing our spaceship.
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Kathleen Dalton Woodbury
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Not a first line:

I have to wonder if some of you have really thought about your first lines and what they would lead to in a story.

I say this because some of them seem to be more like last lines in some ways--there's a sort of summing up in them that doesn't look like it will lead to anything further.


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I had always loved mowing my lawn, riding my mower and smelling the freshly cut grass, until the day when the circle of teeth first appeared.
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So a princess, an elf and a dwarf walk into a bar.
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Little Rabbit Foo-Foo groaned and whacked the snooze button again, reluctant to haul his cottontail out of bed and face yet another soul-crushing day of hopping through the forest, picking up field mice and bashing them on the head.
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Jean returned to camp and found her husband gone, but his flesh folded over the picnic bench.

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Jan tilted her umbrella into the wind and leaped across the rain-splattered moat, where tiny crocodiles dove out of sight.

What a good exercise!


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Squire Gilbert dodged a kick, snatched his hand away from the mare's fangs, and made another grab for her trailing reins.
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Billie peeked under his bed to see if the gnome was still gnawing on his shoe.

Nate Sanderson snapped his laptop shut and glanced under his desk again, to make sure the gnome was still trapped in the recycling bin.

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Gerda hugged the lance under her arm and peered through her visor at the scrawniest troll she had ever seen.
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Nathan wondered if the silver-gray tail hanging from his shirt drawer was just another dragon, or if he had finally caught an ice lizard.
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1. Marge checked the mug to find two fairies struggling to pull their wings free of the coffee's surface tension; her trap worked.

2. Marge hung strips of double-sided tape from the porch roof, in hopes of reducing the fairy population.

3. Marge ordered a Bug Zapper to try it on the fairies.

4. Marge kept the porch light off so the fairies wouldn't gather by her door.


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Axot put the final edge on the battle ax he'd shaped from scrap metal and glanced at the mutant horde beyond the corrugated gates.
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Hannah hesitated to heal the pastor, afraid that it would seem prideful and her gift would be taken away.
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Ray looked at the android who'd delivered his divorce settlement, and said, "Robot or not, I'm going to kick the S#!t out of you."
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Bridget tapped her wand impatiently, waiting for the goblins to stop their bickering.
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The blinding green light vanished; Horton felt different as he looked down at the muscles now adorning his formerly emaciated body.
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When Fiskill had moved his family into the abandoned mousehole at Chocolate Chip's Bakery, he was certain he'd never have to worry about food again--until he found Skullfang the Rat had moved his gang into another hole in the store.
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As Rymann looked down on the charred remains of the friar, he tightened his belt again and resolved that today the chase would begin in earnest.
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I always knew I was adopted, but I never knew it was because of a prophecy, until today.
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Just as his final words would have sealed King Hrulka's coronation, an arrow found its way into the High Mage's throat, then another soon followed into the prospective King's as well.
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As Basil went to cut into his birthday cake, the icing opened its eyes and screamed.
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Satomi knew his luck was bad, but waking up with a splitting headache and being held at gun point was a little much.
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The alien-flesh wriggled on my arm like it wanted to be free of me.

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The morning after his foray into the Egyptian museum was fraught with terror as he looked in the mirror and found the eyes of Anubis looking back at him from a black snouted face.
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People run in fear from me every time the cyber-mites crawl from my right eye to the left.
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It wasn't the first time Jared had been wrong about someone's gender, but earthling's don't imprison you in your own gravitational field.
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He didn't realize she'd gone through his flesh, until he got out of the shower and saw the reflection of a blackened bite mark on his shoulder, spreading dark tendrils toward his neck.
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Silver flecked wings beat the air down as Angera soared through the air.
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Everyday Yatmeen tests her roots and shakes her leaves, hoping that it would be the day she gains her freedom.

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My cowl did not hide the severe burns the wizard's fire had caused on my face.
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Lt. Morgan DeVries of the Terran Space Service (Diplomatic Corps), forced herself to focus on the man in front of her, not the duck-billed headdress he wore.
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My mind inverted upon itself, I was falling, falling, falling, deeper and deeper into the infinite velvet blackness only to be plunged into my doom by the words: "Do you take Armina the Strongarm as your lawfully wedded wife?"
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IB, your mind is a disturbing place. And why do your rules rule?

Entry (notice my abject obedience):

Sally struggled for years to break past her telepathic barriers, only to find her mind linked to a slobbering lunatic.

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MrsBrown, you need to edit your (astute) comment, so that you can have a first line to enter--dem's da rulez.

Entry:

Neither rotting coffin nor the feasting of wriggling maggots could stop me from clawing my way back to the world of men, back to those who'd buried me.


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Riffen peered down at the advancing detachment of guards, wondering if they would notice the bloody footprints on the steps leading up to his chambers and the tingle of magic fire that would soon help them join their compatriots in Jingo's Hell.
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quote:

And why do your rules rule?

I'm just good? Oh, well. I just want to keep this thread on track.

Has anyone else found it simple to keep genre, a hook and a taste of character in the first line?

ENTRY:
The prey were necking in their convertible, totally ingorant of my wings unfurling and stretching out above them.

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Ninety-three million miles is a long way to jump, especially barefoot, but I was so much better than all the other morons in my class.
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quote:
Has anyone else found it simple to keep genre, a hook and a taste of character in the first line?

Have I done that? My entries were pretty easy to toss out, but some seem more effective than others, and I don't know if other people would say I've met those objectives. I find myself assuming that the speculative element is a hook, which of course is not necessarily true.

How about a contest along these lines? (Allowing entries we already tried.) I'd like to list my favorites that the rest of you have submitted

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Gertrude landed in the crowded courtyard, snapped her wings shut, and gazed around at the astonished faces before turning back into an old woman.

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Burn fell in love with the Lokarian princess the moment she stepped into the Garden of Stones.
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Stones was burned up the moment Prince Lokarian stepped up to his intended and planted a garden of kisses on her face.

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Derrick hated technical documents, but he jumped at the chance to write the requirements spec for the [insert cool scientific device here].
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The whole damned human race was tired, Jack decided.
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Aran had enough time to think, rather sullenly, that reversing a gravitational field was NOT as easy as flipping his feet down and landing on the ceiling before he blacked out.
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"The information's classified," John said, sweeping under the desk for bugs, "if I told you, you'd have to kill me."

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