quote:But such justifications did not keep the sweat from beading on his forehead, nor his heart from racing, nor his shame from burning red on his cheeks.
OR THIS?
quote:But such justifications did not keep the sweat from beading on his forehead, nor his heart racing, nor his shame burning red on his cheeks.
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The first: it's all about parallel sentence structure. If you said "from" in the first bit, you have to continue it through the rest of the sentence. It flows better that way: read them both out loud a couple of times and I think you'll see what I mean.
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I like the first. The only problem is the word "justication," it's big and latin and it doesn't belong.
It reminded me of
quote:the race is not to the swift, nor the battle to the strong, neither yet bread to the wise, nor yet riches to men of understanding, nor yet favor to men of skill; but time and chance happen to them all.