I crouched on the ledge of the building, the tips of my black boots jutting out over the blur of headlights and people far below. A finger of wind curled up around my neck and I closed my eyes and tilted my head towards the sky. I could smell the storm in the distance. The storm was why I had come to this height. I would immerse myself in it, feel the rain envelop me, its icy pellets stinging my cold skin senseless, ripping away all scent except for that of the elements -- water and air singed by lightening. I often scaled the buildings of my city during a storm, most often to find, amid the wind that whipped my hair around my face, a moment of escape, a moment to forget. And today, of all the days in the past thirty years that I had wanted to forget, today, I desperately needed to forget.

[This message has been edited by Ennis (edited April 08, 2009).]

[This message has been edited by Ennis (edited April 08, 2009).]

Anyway, hey .

I liked your opening line, but there are things in the rest of it that I think could do with another look.

* 'A finger of wind curled up around my neck' - I really didn't like this image. I don't see how a finger can properly personify (or anthropomorphise, I suppose) the wind, and I can't see what the point in it is either. Are you trying to create the idea of brushing the neck? Or is it to justify the 'curled around' part? If anything at all, I suppose you could say things like 'a tendril of wind', but a finger is too small, too solid and too stable to do the job, in my opinion.
* 'and I closed my eyes and tilted my head towards the sky' - I think you could put a very brief action on the end of this as a precursor to the smelling of the storm (e.g. 'and tilted my head towards the sky, breathing deeply'). I think it would add to the effect, giving us more sensory detail.
* 'I could smell the storm in the distance. The storm was why I had come to this height.' - I'd suggest getting rid of the second 'the storm' and putting an 'it' instead, and possibly joining the two sentences together (e.g. 'smell the storm in the distance - it was why I had come'). I know this gives you two 'it's close together, but I think 'it it' sticks out less than 'the storm the storm'.
* 'I would immerse myself in it, feel the rain envelop me, its icy pellets stinging my cold skin senseless' - the immersing bit is fine, but I find it hard to imagine rain enveloping something, and I too had a problem with 'stinging my cold skin senseless.' Actually, I wasn't too keen on 'icy pellets', either (specifically 'pellets') - it's rain, not hail. Anyway, it just sounds odd, somehow. I think 'to sting something senseless' seems contradictory (a sensation causing a lack of sensation). I suggest rewording it, using a word like 'numb' (just something simple, e.g. 'its icy pellets numbing my cold skin'. There are lots of ways you could do it).
* 'ripping away all scent' - I stopped at 'ripping away'. I could imagine the rain 'blocking out' all other scents, for example, but I'm not sure how it would rip them away.
* 'water and air singed by lightening' - I have no idea why this sticks out at me but I don't like the word 'singed' there. Maybe it's something to do with 'singed water', I don't know.
* Your last two sentences are really clunky. Frankly, I would cut bits, restructure others, and split the whole lot into three sentences. I put this example together in about 10 seconds, so it's not brilliant, but hopefully you see what I'm getting at: 'I often scaled the buildings of my city during a storm. Amid the wind that whipped my hair around my face, I looked mostly for a moment of escape, a moment to forget. Of all the days in the past thirty years that I had wanted to forget, today, I desperately needed to forget.' It is not astonishingly good, but it is far, far easier to read, and I've not written anything new - I've just reorganised your prose, and cut a few things. I'd definitely keep 'I often scaled the buildings of my city during a storm' as a single sentence, at any rate.
* I'm being very petty now, but you misspelt 'noiseless' in your title.

I think you have the makings of a good opening, here. All I think it really needs is an overhaul, and then I would definitely read on. Really, despite how nit-picky I got, it's just those last two clunky sentences that put me off.

Hope this helped,
Daniel.

Here's line, by line:

I crouched on the ledge of the building, the tips of my black boots jutting out over the blur of headlights and people far below. [I like this, but I worry that it's a cliche vamp image--made me think of Underworld] A finger of wind curled up around my neck and I closed my eyes and tilted my head towards the sky. [I like this visual, but I would cut it, cause the next sentance is stronger] I could smell the storm in the distance. The storm [It] was why I had come to this height. [seems clunky, maybe: "up here."] I would [needed to] immerse myself in it, [Cut: I like the rest better. Too much can take away from the power of the words] feel the rain envelop me, its icy pellets stinging my cold skin senseless, ripping away all scent except for that of the elements [Not sure what this is trying to show me. It and the next bit after seem overdone cause I'm unsure what he/she's getting at. Is the MC trying to wash the blood off? What? I wouldn't get that because at this point I'm unaware that he/she's a vamp] -- water and air singed by lightening. [like I said, not sure what this is trying to show me] I often scaled the buildings of my city during a storm, most often [you say, "often" twice] to find, amid the wind that whipped my hair around my face, a moment of escape, a moment to forget. And today, of all the days in the past thirty years that I had wanted to forget [Clunky], today, I desperately needed to forget. [To me this is your hook and it gets a bit lost. I would have this be the second or third line.]

I think the biggest thing I see here is that the visual/sensory gets a bit muddled, like bluephoenix said. And your hook is a burried under it. Plus, I think I'd like to know more about the mc than the storm. I like the idea of what you're doing here, though. Be sure to post again with the revamp.

Hope this helps.