The letter was a form rejection, but there was a handwritten note at the bottom. Specifically, she says, in part:

[quote]I found the sample confusing; I think the action needs to be clarified{/quote]

I'm having trouble figuring this out. Really. The sample was the first three chapters. That's through the first attempt to kill Crystal.

Of those of you who've read it (Kitti, OWASM), can you think back and help me with this? This part hasn't changed significantly (a few minor tweaks is all) from the first draft. I thought it was pretty clear.

The only real action in that part is the assasination attempt and Valeriah's chase.

Anyone out there willing to read the first three chapters (about 40 pages) and help me see what she means?

I'm really at a loss on this one.