Just finished a quick, 1700-word short story that occurred to me today. It's meant to be a little light, even amusing. Here's an opening and volunteers to read the whole thing are appreciated.
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A tear trickled down Jeannie’s cheek as Aladdin came to an end and she switched off the television. The cartoon genie had been fortunate to find such an understanding master to set him free. Jeannie had never even convinced one to write her free in his will.
The familiar tugging at her side told her that her current master wanted her again. She flew out of her bottle, leaving the comfort and cushions of the tiny living area behind in order to jump, full-size into the real world.
She did not recognize the master that awaited her, tapping his large foot impatiently and grinning with a wide, toothless grin. “I don’t believe it!”
“What do you want?” Jeannie saked. The magic tying her to the bottle and to the whim of her masters said she had to obey their orders, it did not say she had to do it politely.
The man looked taken aback. “That’s no way to talk to your master.”
[This message has been edited by Christine (edited June 16, 2004).]
Posted by MaryRobinette (Member # 1680) on :
Sure. Send it over.
One question.
quote:“What do you want?” Jeannie saked.
So, is she offering him sake?
[This message has been edited by MaryRobinette (edited June 16, 2004).]
Posted by Christine (Member # 1646) on :
Oh, for goodness sakes! Posted by djvdakota (Member # 2002) on :
OK. I want to read. You said once in an email to me that you seem to do better at comedy when you're not trying. So now I want to see the result when you are.
Posted by GZ (Member # 1374) on :
I'd be willing to take a look. I'm always a sucker for light comedy.
Posted by Kolona (Member # 1438) on :
I have time for a short one, though I'm a little disappointed it wasn't 'saked.' I thought we were witnessing the birth of a new word. Posted by wetwilly (Member # 1818) on :
Always willing to help you out, Christine. Send it over at your convenience. I absolutely LOVE stories about sake. This is going to be great.
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
Ditto.
Posted by Christine (Member # 1646) on :
Thanks, guys! I'm going to go ahead and call that enough. It is pretty short, after all. Posted by wetwilly (Member # 1818) on :
I just read it, Christine, and it's very good. I really liked this story. Funny and enjoyable. And well-written.
Posted by MaryRobinette (Member # 1680) on :
Christine, I know you sent this to me. I read it, but now I can't find the file.
I enjoyed it but didn't laugh aloud anywhere. On the other hand, I was jetlagged, so very few things were funny at that point. The only thing that I remember thinking was that I thought Jeannie was the TV Jeannie until some point in the story. I enjoyed her modern clothes, but might have needed somesort of hint that she was in modern dress earlier.
Oh. I take it back. I did laugh when she made him upchuck the million dollars.
If you'll send me the file again, I'll give you more details, but that's all I can remember.
Posted by Rahl22 (Member # 1411) on :
Well, since you're not sending it out any more -- I guess I'll just have to hope you place it somewhere because I'd like to read it
