(It looks like more than 13 lines in the window where I'm typing it in, but it's only 13 in the WP file...) Thanks for reading!
I can’t believe how much I ache for the memory of what really happened in the last few days before my death. But it’s gone. Forever. I stole it from myself a long time ago. Please don’t ask me how long; there’s no way for me to know. I still don’t even know if I’ve died. I hope so, for her sake. I’m not afraid now; just ashamed. And cold.
It would have been her hair, I’ve decided. Something about her would have had to draw my attention in the first place. It must have been her hair that I first noticed if she hadn’t crashed into me, knocking both of us out of the vein of the causeway and into the doorway of the cheap poster shop.
The impact knocked my meeting schedule out of my head, but I bit back a stream of half-hearted curses when I saw she wasn’t a tourist.
Posted by HSO (Member # 2056) on :
Send it along to me... I'll rip it to shreds and then send it back with some tape... free of charge. :P
Will have to wait until tomorrow... it's 11pm where I'm at.
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
Interesting. How much more do you have and do you want readers for it?
Posted by rickfisher (Member # 1214) on :
I'll look. Send as Word or WordPerfect attachment (or .rtf if those won't do), and put Hatrack in the subject line.
Posted by TheoPhileo (Member # 1914) on :
What's this you were saying earlier about clunky writing? I like this a lot. Very intriguing. Maybe just a hair vague in a few spots, but if it isn't like that all the way through, it's good. Send it to me if you'd like, though I can't promise I'll get to it any time soon.
Posted by autumnmuse (Member # 2136) on :
I'm interested. I'll give you a critique if you like; send it over.
Posted by Jeraliey (Member # 2147) on :
Hi, Survivor! It's about 20 pgs. long, and I'd love a critique if you have time! Let me know if you want to take a look. Thanks!
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
Hmmm...Okay. It looks quite readable, so I'm game.
Posted by shadowynd (Member # 2077) on :
You've certainly intrigued me! I'd like a read, if you still need folk.