I believe this is what OSC calls a milieu story, or maybe an idea story. Genre: light science fiction.
Oh, I should say too, the don't expect the ending to be a suprise to the reader, even though it is to the character. Not much of a plot twist. I believed everyone could see it coming...
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I stared at the map for hours. Plastic thumbtacks designated the position of each sighting, their colors revealed the timeframe. A puzzle. A confounding puzzle. And then the pattern hit me.
By penciling lines between sightings, I found they formed layers of approximate semicircles. I extrapolated backwards, drawing lines which intersected at a remote coastal area. It indicated a sudden exodus, four weeks previous.
I swiveled my chair to face the computer screen. I combed all news events involving Canada’s Pacific coast. It did not take me long to find the article detailing the June 4th earthquake. The epicenter occurred— not too far from the area I had pinpointed.
[This message has been edited by ChrisOwens (edited October 19, 2004).]
I'm not convinced that it's Milieu, either, since it seems you're using a pretty ordinary world. Your story isn't about the exploration and discovery of our own world, is it? I hope not.
At any rate, I think this is a lukewarm opening. I mean, it is written well. I have no complaints about your Voice. It just didn't grip me (sorry I missed your previous entry). It actually might be because of your intro, though.
Really, I think that this may simply be starting in the wrong place. Go ahead and send me your first draft, and I'll let you know.