"So when did you first know you had this power?" this was the first interview I had agreed to cooperate with in years.
"Well, I knew I had a gift as a child being able to see the unseen and such. But it never really grew until the day I started to believe that i was different from the others. It was really quite neat how my senses grew and eventually my strength." I replied to the reporter’s question.
“How exactly were you 'different' from others as a child?"
"Well not so much physically different, but mentally and socially. You see, as a kid, I knew I could empower my strengths by means of blood flow and aura enhancement along with the physical muscular strength. I wasn’t a fat kid but I also wasn’t in shape, and still am not. A power like mine you develop though many years of meditation and constant training." I was begging to regret my acceptance to this 'highly renowned' journalist.
“This all explains how you are able to do your physical feats but how about your real super power? How about your ability to imagine things to be real?"
Aside from that, superhero stories are always fun, but I'd be careful of making the superhero too super, if you get my drift.
Also, the first sentence doesn't quite flow right. It's a run on thing, with the opening question jumping into the narrative without break.
Sound fun though.
Just an observation, and not meant to be rude.
Speaking of superhero genre, I have one in the works that should be on here in a week or so. ( At least the first 13 lines anyways)
-Bryan-
[This message has been edited by Monolith (edited January 06, 2005).]
A) This is a questionable way to open a story, with so much vagueness. Stinks of a cliche thriller. But is OK if done OK.
B) The sentence is flawed grammatically. You have two independent clauses, not joined together. Capitilize "this" or do something else to fix.
"Well, I knew I had a gift as a child being able to see the unseen and such. But it never really grew until the day I started to believe that i was different from the others. It was really quite neat how my senses grew and eventually my strength." I replied to the reporter’s question.
Why is "i" not capitilized?
I do not care if it was a spelling mistake. As a reader, I can not continue when such flaws are present. But my general impression to the rest of the text is that it is very info dumpish.