Jonathan R. Thatcher was a pilot. He wasn’t a stereotypical, cocky, arrogant pilot. He was a patriot who believed that one should defend one’s own land, and if need be, one should die for it. And that’s what he was doing. He joined the IAF in 3055 and was sent to Mars in 3058. It was the first time he left Earth’s orbit, and a three-month voyage took its toll. He spent most of his time on the transport’s flight simulator. Each pilot is required to have 48 hours of sim time to fly the F-234. This craft was known as a “sky skipper.” It skimmed between atmospheres at extremely high altitudes, and served as a surveillance and light-bombing craft....
...His commander told him that he was to pilot an F-234 on Mars a day before he left.
“But sir, only commanders can fly skippers,” he said.
“I know.”
“Well, sir, I’m only a sub-commander.”
“Really?”
“Has the rank requirement been changed?”
“No, John.”
“Sir?”
“Central has just notified me that you have been promoted to the rank of Commander, 2nd class.” Needless to say, John was very excited. Not only because of the honor, but also the raise in pay.
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Unless the story accounts for this by having a collapse or two in the future.
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He wasn’t a stereotypical, cocky, arrogant pilot.
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Needless to say, John was very excited. Not only because of the honor, but also the raise in pay.
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He wasn’t a stereotypical, cocky, arrogant pilot. He was a patriot who believed that one should defend one’s own land, and if need be, one should die for it.
A hero that would die for his land if needed sounds pretty stereotypical to me. I don't really know if that's completely opposite to the way pilots are, because I happen to know not one. But the truth is the "stereotypical" thing doesn't sound good to me.
Just my opinion.
Oh, and about the stereotype, there's a reason why most fighter pilots are cocky. You have to be to fly something that fast and not flake out. It's a matter of confidence. I knew a couple when I was in the Navy, and we chatted. We were all getting out at the time, which is why LT's were talking to a E-5
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This is funny. It's hard to define why; I think it has something to do with the sentence structure, and the "needless to say" .
Funny good, or funny bad?
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I concur about the date roll back. If we can't get to Mars in less than three months, after 1000 years of progress, then we don't deserve to.
If anything I should either roll the date forward, or not mention a date at all. But I think the fact that I didn't say AD is something to think about.
The fact remains that no matter how far technology advances, there is still the great possibility that we won't find some revolutionary way to propel a vehicle through space. It is easy to assume that 1000 years in the future when fossil fuels have been used up (used up about 1000 years ago) that any sort of nuclear propulsion would would be more efficient at a lower speed.
All that aside, there's still the matter of the subject of the story (which I haven't revealed yet) needing much more time than I've given (thus the lack of an AD after the date).
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Oh, and about the stereotype, there's a reason why most fighter pilots are cocky. You have to be to fly something that fast and not flake out. It's a matter of confidence.
Yes, there is a big difference between a fighter pilot and a comercial pilot. Fighter pilots have to fight, and they do it with jet fighters. It's nowhere near the same thing as flying a 747. Not that flying a 747 is easy, it's just nowhere near as complicated as outflying a mig in a dogfight, for instance.
If you jump more than 2-300 years ahead I would have zero point energy drives in place which would allow for theoretical travel at near light speeds. Or even wormhole or "warp" drives (not the star trek kind).
I did not notice you left out AD, and unless you draw specific attention to it, I don't think most readers would consider it's absence significant.
If they are using a different dating system possibly use it, so that the reader doesn't automatically associate the dating method with the roman calendar.
Yes, you could get there in 8 days, but the energy used to slow the ship down would be counter-productive, and dangerous. Also there could be unforseen side-effects or some unknown controversy that could outlaw the research (granted, there aren't the obvious moral issues seen in genetic research).
And if you think the line would be funny if intentionally funny, it's a good funny. I wasn't really going out of my way for a laugh, but I wasn't trying to be too serious either...
But assume six to eight gees acceleration from Earth, also assuming that either they are genetically able to handle that amount, or they have suits to reinforce or whatever, and then you accelerate for a certain amount of time, you will have to decelerate for the same amount of time once you get to where you're going. But, again, I state the obvious.
Where was I going with this..?
So for this particular story, we assume that it is much more efficient to transport the person with a regular engine than it is to use what could be the equivilent of flying from New York to New Jersey on a 747.
I wasn't saying that the g's (that would be g's not gees ) would be too much to handle, I'm just saying it would be a very slow aceleration to make it safe. After all, most people can't stand over 12 g's, and astronauts pull around 8 (I think) at takeoff. And they're traveling in atmosphere...
As to the build up...I'm not really sure if we are talking about the same thing.
You funnel the AM material from it's magnetic containment field into the reaction mass, then it shoots out the back, there would be a gradual ramping up of G-force as the ship began moving and then once you had reached 1 g of acceleration it would be constant. You could increase the AM flow to push it beyond that. After going halfway, you have a moment of zero g as the ship flips over and then continues a 1g burn to slow itself down. I believe that puts the trip to Mars at 8 days.
The AM drive being proposed by NASA only produces about a .20 of a G in acceleration because we can't currently produce large supplies of AM, which is why they give a 30 day trip time.
But please, let's not get into a big debate over this. It's really not an important aspect of the story.
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Oh one little thing, given the naval feel of the ranks you might wanna change the name of the spacecraft to something other than "skipper" since that is the naval term for a ship captain.
The only reason I harped on it is that in a sci-fi story consistent and plausible technology are really important to the setting and world.
Technologies existing in a vacuum or technologies not being exploited consistently are often big points of contention for some readers. A great example of this is "transporter" technology in Star Trek, it's a nifty idea, but it has been exploited in so many different ways that it's application should be FAR more widespread in the ST universe. It is implemented far more consistently in ST Enterprise than ST, STNG, STDS9, STV.
I just don't want to see you fall into the same pitfall I have in some of my stories where a tech is introduced solely as a plot device or some such without understanding the ramifications of introducing that tech, or in this case not introducing that tech.
Consistency and plausibility are, in my opinion, more critical in Sci-Fi than in Fantasy. In Sci-Fi you are dealing with an extrapolated world that we can understand, as opposed to a Fantasy world which can have radical departures from the world we know and can get over inconsistencies with the inclusion of "magic".
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Leaving out AD or CE, whichever one prefers to use, doesn't necessarily mean the reader will catch it, I didn't and naturally assumed AD, afterall it is the future. You could indicate something like this: "He joined the IAF in year 3055, though he can't be certain of the exact year, for all he knew it could be 2555..."
This suggests to the reader that Thatcher's world screwed-up their dating system. How is up to you. Mav.
The AM engine is interesting, but I wouldn't presume it to be any more than theory at this point. Ion engines are proven, and it fits the story to have that time gap between travels.
Putting a date on any story is dangerous, and I try to make it a habit to never put the date on a futuristic story. 3055 may seem too far off now, but weren't there supposed to be flying cars everywhere in the year 2000?
It's just one of my pet peeves, when people use questions like "where are the flying cars?" as an argument. As a question, on the other hand, I have no problem with it. But it can't actually be a question in this case, because it is only asked by implication.
Anyway, this has nothing to do with your story, so feel free to ignore it.
The reason science fiction generally presents steady and predictable advances in technology is that historically that is how it has worked, with the exception of the last 80-100 years where technological advancement has moved at a MUCH higher rate.
Even assuming the worst, if the period is 1000 years, then look at the last 1000 years. We've gone from horses and wagons, to hypersonic aircraft and rocket powered space craft. Though in fairness, we've actually done that in the last 150 years.
I didn't ask, "Where are the flying cars." There are a few prototypes. It's a matter of finalization of the product, and getting the massive ammounts of software and computer power into the car.
But the fact is that that all takes a long time. We're still working on getting regular cars to drive themselves.
Does anyone remember what happended after Challenger? I wasn't even a year old when it happened, but I do know that it took a VERY long time to get another shuttle in the air.
Now imagine we build an anti-matter ship 300 years from now. We send that ship off, and everything seems fine, so we build 100 more. But all it takes is one ship to malfunction. One glitch that sends way too much anti-matter and not enough matter, forcing the anti-matter out to combine with some part of the rest of the ship, the magnetic shield fails and lets out the entire supply of anti-matter. It would one of the most powerful explosions humans will ever witness.
And then every single one of those ships is grounded as quickly as possible and an investigation is launched. Let's say they find the cause in a few years, and there's no way to fix it in any reasonable ammount of time. So we instead invest in much more reliable types of engines, and while the bugs are worked out of anti-matter drives, the entire economy is centered around these other types of ships. AM ships would only be trusted by a few at first, and only on very long voyages. Perhaps some piece of legislature is passed making that the law.
Maybe.
Who knows?
That's my point. It doesn't matter what scientists say we'll be able to do, because we don;t know what can go wrong. So why don't we just assume for the sake of this story that a trip to Mars is 3 months. Is that really that hard to do?
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That's my point. It doesn't matter what scientists say we'll be able to do, because we don;t know what can go wrong. So why don't we just assume for the sake of this story that a trip to Mars is 3 months. Is that really that hard to do?
With the year given and no indication of why that situation exists...the answer for me is yes.
I know alot of hard sci-fi/futurist fans that would be in the same boat.
Now if you have specific reasons for why it takes 3 months to go to Mars 1000 years from now, then great. But you need to have a reason and relate that reason to the reader or alot of sci-fi junkies will dismiss the story out of hand.
The exception to this is if the story is supposed to be space opera (like Star Wars or the EE Doc Smith Lensmen and Skylark novels).
I do want to know that there is an explanation at some point in the book.
Since this forum is here so that we can express possible issues that may arise from our reading of those lines, providing that information to the critiquer would be nice.
Were that information provided and explained up front then this thread would have 10-12 fewer replies :-)
"Wish granted!"
*reinacts Survivor ignoring mode*
No one ever asked if it WOULD be explained.
I feel like Jackie Chan at the beggining of Rush Hour... except I don't know karate...
Let me show you what I’m talking about. I’m not trying to change your words just give you an example of the top of my head...
Jonathan R. Thatcher wasn’t the stereotypical, arrogant, asshole fighter-pilot. He understood why others were that way. The job was high-risk and a puffed up ego helped not to focus on it’s dangers. John didn’t need to psyche himself out, though. His motivation was much simpler. He was a patriot who believed that one should defend one’s own land, and if need be, one should die for it.
Ps: I’ve always liked sci-fi heroes with old world names, and in this case it’s an artisan name (no one knows what a thatcher is now, so it would be totally forgotten in the future...) and it seems cooler.
Also, the story being extremely far in the future doesn't bother me either. And if there's a later explanation for it, even better...
JOHN!
I think I'll word it a lot like that. I might even make the dedication, "To John, who put the asshole in the first sentence."
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Ps: I’ve always liked sci-fi heroes with old world names, and in this case it’s an artisan name (no one knows what a thatcher is now, so it would be totally forgotten in the future...) and it seems cooler.
I can't remember why I picked Thatcher, but I think it might have had something to do with having seen A Knights Tale shortly before writing it. I doubt many people know what you call a roof builder/repairer (heck, I doubt many people know what a cobbler is. They probably think they build roads), but I don't think it will be completely lost. I'm not as pessimistic as Asimov, because there will always be geeks, especially in word history.
Now Cooper would probably confound some...
How about Fletcher?
A fletcher makes arrows.
Okay, I can't hold it in: Tanner. Eh? Eh? Anyone?
I amended Netstorm's attempt to revive the Word Play topic to one for discussing surnames entitled "Surname Play" in the Open Discussions on Writing area.
See y'all there.
For another, there is the problem of having a remotely operated craft on a planet that has severe sandstorms, etc. This story takes place before the teraformation of Mars is complete, and therefore not all of the water has returned to the surface.