"Particle entanglement is a natural process that occurs within the fourth dimension in response to Le Guin's Rule of Universal Connectivity, (RUC). . . . It is postulated that RUC could be applied to organized matter, such as stones or even human beings, which would then, theoretically, behave in parallel fashion similarly to the way entangled particles do."
--From a July 2170 Editorial in Popular Quantum Mechanics
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What is thought to be possible could be happening now-- in fact, is happening, as seen in two children, their lives, for a time, running parallel.
. . . The story then goes on to alternating POV's of the two children.
Also, what is your viewpoint? The only real sentence we have to work with is the intro which seems very third person omniscient, almost like Rod Serling narrating in the old Twilight Zone. Is this intro (after the quote) truly necessary or would it be better to move right into the story?
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Anyhow, thanks for your interest. I'm sending the latest draft to you, 77chevy.
Wbriggs, would you like to see both main drafts, the one that jumped right in and the one that doesn't, for comparison?
I am wondering now about how this principle will work in your story. Do the two masses connected have to be the same kind of thing, like two humans or two rocks or two beasts? Or can two different things connect?
Ar both connected masses living in the same time or can this connection occur between two time frames? Are the two masses in parallel universes? Do they interact or function in a parallel manner without being aware of it or each other? Do the actions of one affect the actions of the other? Do the actions of one interfer with the free will of the other?
You've got me curious.
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That said, I think the story idea is intriguing, and I'd like to see where you're taking this.
--Jaya
Here are the first thirteen lines of the latest draft. Right at the moment, it's going to stay a short short-story, at least, until I get some of my other projects done. If and when I come back to it, I certainly will explore all of those ideas you had, RL, by making this piece the prologue for a novel. It certainly offers a lot of possibilities.
As it is now, the story is pretty much plotless, and I'm not making any excuses. Read it for yourself and see if it works. Also, without those first two sentences, the rest of the story wouldn't have a purpose. That passage illuminates what transpires in the next 800 words. I've trimmed it as much as I dare, (with help from Mekvat, to whom I give a huge Thank You!) but it's not going anywhere. I suppose you could say it's a mini-prologue. I thought about making it an excerpt from an ansible message instead of a magazine, but it doesn't really affect anything because neither of the children is aware of the other, and I'm keeping it that way. If I were to novelize the idea, then yes, they would be. In a short-short story, there's no room for that level of complexity.
Anyhow, I'd really like to know if anyone is willing to give it a read. I want to know if the average initial reader would pick up on the parallels. If anyone would like to see it, let me know. Thanks!