Mary is the mysterious woman. And through his travels he will meet several women who look just like her...he will eventually meet and marry Mary.
I made the changes based on some good advice, earlier in the chapter she complains about his dreams and his lack of commitment.
Did you ever come to a place in your life when you just knew you were at a crossroad? Time stood still as I sat there trying to figure out what I should do. I was ready to do something because until now…I had done nothing I could be proud of.
Who was I kidding? This was the opportunity of a lifetime and I knew it. I was afraid….maybe even terrified. I was only eighteen. It’s not fair that one should decide his who life in a moment and at such a young age.
It would mean that I could no longer live in this time line. I could only visit long enough to receive instructions and bring back what I had found.
For the rest of my life, with the exception of those short periods of time, I would live my life in the past.
They call us gofers. I guess because we go-for information. Mary called me a gofer. Somehow this job and the dreams of this mysterious woman were connected.
When I entered the bedroom a note was laying on the bed.
[I’m going home to stay with my mother. I know you don’t want to marry me. I’m tired of wasting my time - Judy. PS, don’t try to call me.]
I checked the closets. All her stuff was gone. I guess I should have seen this coming.
[This message has been edited by Judas (edited May 07, 2005).]
Susan
Are either Mary or Judy the mysterious woman? Or is that a third woman?
2. The explanation of the "gofer"
3. Reading the note.
The note part hooked me in. I liked it based on what I gleaned from part 2.
However I felt jarred moving from part to part. Is that the effect you wanted?
Only my 2 cents
Dmfitzgerald