730 words, general fiction, looking for a few readers. I already got some comments on a previous version, but this has been edited and changed since the flash challenge, and I'd like to check that it works in the new form.
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Imogene stuck out her tongue. "Of course I will. I'm not scared."
Jamie shook her head resolutely. "No, you can't. You're too short. They won't let you on the ride unless you head is higher than the alligator."
"I'm taller than any ol' alligator." Imogene's pig tails stuck out with the indignity of such a presumption on Jamie's part. Imogene was Gizmo Girl, and Gizmo Girl would never be beaten by an alligator. "Anyway, why wouldn't they let a super hero on the roller coaster."
Posted by Eddy Gemmell (Member # 2581) on :
Sorry but I'm totally confused.
You only tell the reader what is being spoken about in the last line or two, until then I had no idea what they were talking about and it made no sense. As a result I was already annoyed by the time I found out.
Also 'Imogene'...do you really mean that spelling?
Posted by Isaiah13 (Member # 2283) on :
What's wrong with Imogene? Sure, it's a little obscure, but I like it. More so now that I've googled it and found out that it means "image." Kinda fitting for a little girl who sees herself as a super hero.
Posted by hoptoad (Member # 2145) on :
Imogen is the usual spelling.
Pronounced Imm-oh-jenn
not
Imm-oh-jeen
But I don't know if it matters.
But I don't know how she sticks out her tongue AND speaks at the same time.
[This message has been edited by hoptoad (edited June 02, 2005).]
Posted by NewsBys (Member # 1950) on :
I'm interested and would like to read some more.
Posted by thedorkygirl (Member # 2639) on :
I have never seen Imogen -- I have only ever seen Imogene. I've pronounced it gene for as long as I can remember -- haven't heard anybody say gen.
Quick googling confirms that there are "Jean" Imogenes out there.
Though it's not a common name, is it? I saw it in a book ("No More Cornflakes" maybe? or was that the Hortense book? There were cousins and bubble gum wrappers, and the book started with her following strangers along a New York sidewalk. Yeah, I'ma shut up now.).
Posted by hoptoad (Member # 2145) on :
Imogene is okay. Emogen is okay. Emogene is okay too.
Parents have wildy varying tastes for naming babies and there are so many permutations. Nevertheless Imogen is most common. Like I said I dont think it matters.
I remember a girl a school whose name was Penelope, her family pronounce it PennyLope. Who cares really.
Call the character Imma-Djinn as far as I am concerned. I like that better.
Posted by Shendülféa (Member # 2408) on :
As someone mentioned before, it's a little obscure, but definitely interesting. Posted by Kathleen Dalton Woodbury (Member # 59) on :
Pronouncing it "Imma-Djinn" means you could also pronoun it "imagine."
<shrug>
For whatever that may be worth.
Posted by onepktjoe (Member # 2352) on :
Send it on over GZ. I'll give it a read.
Posted by GZ (Member # 1374) on :
onepktjoe, thanks for the offer. Coming your way in a minute or two.
[This message has been edited by GZ (edited June 09, 2005).]
