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Posted by rustafarianblackpolarbear (Member # 2638) on :
 
this is to continue, you guessed it, scifi... WHOA.
The other one is now reserved for critiquing since it is perfectly 13 lines and I thought that was pretty neat.

Anyway, getting on with the magic of storytelling.

Along time ago in a tiny bucket, there lived a clever little knight named Mordred who was no bigger than a shrivelled miniature marshmallow. In that tiny bucket he often designed delicate dinnerplates, despite dropping the occasional hint that he was a homosexual knight seeking solace in servile somnambulance. Since the accident in the privy, he's been wearing diapers. Only the lady of the house is tired of cleaning up his dirty mess. One day he went too far. She found, in his bucket: a hallucination in which he killed something not of this earth. He forgot to dispose of the hallucinogenic space body, unleashing plagues of rancid earthworms, spreading much shriveled miniature marshmallow eating that had diahrea for a fortnight. Accordingly, scatological research became the source of dyslexic llama dancing. In other news, aliens from the planet Earth are infiltrating the mouths of carnivorous chickens (that is, all of them) of which only three survived. And then the monolith awoke. It wasn't a pretty sight. Then a herbivorous crocodile some thirty leagues away heard a submarine approaching rapidly and he ate some mildly interesting seaweed before choking in disgust. The EVIL octopus came at him…

Only add 5 words at a time, don't copy and paste it. I probably won't bother doing this again.
 


Posted by rustafarianblackpolarbear (Member # 2638) on :
 
so emphasizingly evilly that it

 
Posted by Spaceman (Member # 9240) on :
 
blew a gasket and lost
 
Posted by bladeofwords (Member # 2132) on :
 
all semblance of control. Such
 
Posted by Ahavah (Member # 2599) on :
 
is the nature of octopi.
 
Posted by Spaceman (Member # 9240) on :
 
It is also the nature
 
Posted by Ezuma (Member # 2646) on :
 
of evil masticating platypusses which
 
Posted by Jeraliey (Member # 2147) on :
 
masticate evilly in order to
 
Posted by MCameron (Member # 2391) on :
 
mate. The tiny knight asked
 
Posted by Exploding Monkey (Member # 2444) on :
 
the platypuss and the octopi

[This message has been edited by Exploding Monkey (edited June 17, 2005).]
 


Posted by pixydust (Member # 2311) on :
 
"What has become of me? It is..."
 
Posted by Ezuma (Member # 2646) on :
 
"...like I cease to smell..."
 
Posted by Ray (Member # 2415) on :
 
"...of onions and garlic. What..."
 
Posted by LeGLeSs (Member # 2655) on :
 
"...a strong yet delicious smell..."

(??? hehe nice story so far people :P)
 


Posted by Ahavah (Member # 2599) on :
 
"Knights and onions don't mix,"
 
Posted by Spaceman (Member # 9240) on :
 
Onions on the side, please!
 
Posted by bladeofwords (Member # 2132) on :
 
For I wish to bring...
 
Posted by Spaceman (Member # 9240) on :
 
an olive on the scene!
 
Posted by bladeofwords (Member # 2132) on :
 
"An olive is forever. However
 
Posted by tchernabyelo (Member # 2651) on :
 
cheese is merely temporary. And
 
Posted by Shendülféa (Member # 2408) on :
 
while cheese tastes quite delicious,
 
Posted by Ray (Member # 2415) on :
 
parfaits rule the planet." Meanwhile,
 
Posted by Spaceman (Member # 9240) on :
 
back at the ranch, the
 
Posted by Meenie (Member # 2633) on :
 
bucket sprang a leak, and
 
Posted by Shendülféa (Member # 2408) on :
 
the cows came to drink
 
Posted by Killerkop (Member # 2671) on :
 
away what was left of
 
Posted by Spaceman (Member # 9240) on :
 
the old mill stream. Superficially,
 


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