950 words, humor, I would like full critiques (but I'll take other comments too).
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Bless me, Father, for I have sinned.
Oh, I don't have to say that any more? OK. Well, here's what happened. Friday night I met this really hot girl at a party over on Jefferson Street. No, wrong sin. I wish! Just kidding, Father.
Anyway, she was so freaking amazing. I mean, she was so slim, and her body was perfect. I just had to meet her. Do you ever see the kind of girl that just makes you think, this one's it? This is the one I've got to have?
I guess not. She was talking to this really big guy -- looked like a football player on steroids -- and I thought I'd just see when she stepped away from him, and move in. I work better without competition.
Posted by wbriggs (Member # 2267) on :
Oh, yes, and if anybody has ideas where to publish non-SF humor . . . I never know where to market these.
Posted by pixydust (Member # 2311) on :
Look's fun. I'll read it. I may not be able to get back to you for a week or two, though, cause I'm headin' out on vacation. Yah!
I have a few of these off-kilter ones myself, and no clue as to what to do with them.
[This message has been edited by pixydust (edited June 24, 2005).]
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
quote:I wish! Just kidding, Father.
I'll try it.
Posted by kkmmaacc (Member # 2643) on :
Sounds good -- I'll look at it if you would like. Any specific turnaround time needed?
-K.
Posted by wbriggs (Member # 2267) on :
bump
A couple more?
Posted by Elan (Member # 2442) on :
I'd like to take a look at it if you can give me a few days. I'm overloaded right now with critiques, but yours looks fun.
Posted by cklabyrinth (Member # 2454) on :
I'll read, Will. I think I owe you about 5.
Posted by Killerkop (Member # 2671) on :
ill read it, should be able to get you a quick turn around too, (gotta love that, right) but it will be my first offical critique, so, who knows
