I hate to ask this, but I need a good proofreader or so to give this a once through, looking for spelling, puncutation, grammar mistakes, besides the intentional colloquial bent in the narritive and dialog.
No matter how I look it over, I'm blind to it. I see what I meant, instead of what I've typed. And the more I read it, the more sick of it I'm getting...
Genre: Soft SF (though some will say fantasy, some horror) Words: 3518 --------------------------------------------------- I believe you, Mama. I’d like to say that, deep down, I never doubted you. But that ain't true. At least I told folks I believed you, even when it caused me grief. Like the time the Briggs boy cornered me after gym....
He stood six inches above me. “Hey, Danny. Heard your mother went nuts.”
“No, she didn’t,” I said.
“She’s going around saying she saw a Bigfoot,” he said. “That’s nuts if I ever heard it.”
I clenched my fists. “Your mother saw it too.”
He slammed me against a locker. “Are you calling my mom a liar?”
“Are you calling my mom one?”
Posted by dee_boncci (Member # 2733) on :
I'll have a go at it, if you'd like, but I'm not an editor by any stretch. I know what you mean about being blind to flaws in a manuscript once you've been over it a bazillion times.
Posted by dpatridge (Member # 2208) on :
I'll take it too. I should be able to get it proofread fairly quickly, it's the critiquing process that takes forever. Posted by Robyn_Hood (Member # 2083) on :
I'd like to see this. If you need another set of eyes, send it over.
I know what you mean about being blind to the errors and getting tired of trying to find them.
Posted by wbriggs (Member # 2267) on :
I want everyone to know, right now, I have never bullied anyone because his mother believes in Bigfoot. What I actually said was, "Your mother is so hairy, Bigfoot takes pictures of her!"
[This message has been edited by wbriggs (edited July 18, 2005).]
Posted by NewsBys (Member # 1950) on :
I thought maybe you had given Chris a bad crit and he was exacting his revenge. Posted by ChrisOwens (Member # 1955) on :
I worry about naming sometimes, first and last names, as in: "If I name the character this, and it's every somehow published, than so-and-so will think it's them." When often, no matter what thier name is, it's bound be the first or last of somebody I know...
