This is from one of the first flash challenges at Liberty Hall. I'm not sure if I just want to revise it or if I want to do more with it.
Right now I'm looking for any feedback, critiques, or brainstorming ideas that anyone has time to offer.
Thanks guys
----------------- Title: Switch! Word Count: 501 Genre: Sci-fi -----------------
They say a child doesn’t start making coherent memories until after age of three or four, but that isn’t always true. At least, I don’t think it is.
For me, it seems as though I have always had memories. I remember sitting in my crib, playing with my stuffed animals; and standing in front of the oven, watching mom’s chocolate chip cookies bake. I remember learning to walk and talk -- struggling to feel coordinated. I remember...
It’s just that now, I’m not so sure those memories are mine. In fact, I’m not so sure any of my memories are mine.
[This message has been edited by Robyn_Hood (edited September 19, 2005).]
Posted by wbriggs (Member # 2267) on :
I'll read.
BTW, if you also post this at Liberty Hall under PSC Robyn Hood, it'll be even easier than email.
Posted by Robyn_Hood (Member # 2083) on :
Thanks, Will. Actually, I already have it posted in my PSC forum. I can PM it to you or you can comment in the topic if you prefer.
Posted by Miriel (Member # 2719) on :
I'll read it too.
Posted by LMermaid (Member # 2778) on :
I'd like to read the whole story, too.
Posted by NMgal (Member # 2769) on :
Sounds interesting. I'll read it if you send it my way.
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
It's a fast starter, strong conflict right out of the gate and escalating to a hook very quickly.
Posted by Robyn_Hood (Member # 2083) on :
Thanks for the feedback.
Everyone who has offered to read should have it now.
Posted by thexmedic (Member # 2844) on :
I don't have time to read it myself, but I just wanted to say I can't spot anything to crit in the opener. Really good stuff, and a sweet last line.
Posted by Dude (Member # 1957) on :
If you need another reader, you can send it my way -- wolf_dude64@yahoo.com
Posted by Robyn_Hood (Member # 2083) on :
