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Posted by wbriggs (Member # 2267) on :
 
Any suggestions? This should already be up on IGMS, but I think they'll still take it.

William Saxton, a Virginia resident, was lucky enough to be in driving distance of Orson Scott Card's classes at Southern Virginia University, and has never been the same since; he is currently working on a time-travel novel, Big Powwow.

After writing "I Am the Queen," and considering the difficulties in housetraining even earthly pets, he has decided not to have any pets for a while. You can find him online at http://youwillknow.blogspot.com/ .

 


Posted by Silver3 (Member # 2174) on :
 
Grammar nit: "within driving distance"

Replace the semi colon with a period.

More details on the time-travel novel (like set where?)?

Can't think of anything else. And congrats, again! I just read the new version at IGMS, and it's still a hoot.

 


Posted by Elan (Member # 2442) on :
 
Nit: "and has never been the same since" sounds better to my ears if you phrase it: "and has not been the same since."

The whole pet thing sounded weird to me. The sentence structure seemed a little convoluted. I would advise simplifying it a tad. I would rather read more about the Queen story than a decision not to have pets?

How many words are you alloted for this bio?
 


Posted by hoptoad (Member # 2145) on :
 
Ditto on Silver's comments re: 'within'.

Don't think the 'never' as suggested above will work, but agree the sentence sounds wrong. Try 'and hasn't been the same since' to make it less formal.

I like the pet thing. Maybe simplify it to something like: 'after writing Queen, he decided against having pets.' Anyone who read the story will get it.

PS: I had a hoot reading it. It was one of those few times I talked to my wife about a story I'd read. I'm really happy for you and hope things turn out even better than you hope.

[This message has been edited by hoptoad (edited March 02, 2006).]
 


Posted by Constipatron (Member # 3183) on :
 
Please excuse my ignorance, what's IGMS?
 
Posted by Crotalus@work (Member # 2959) on :
 
Intergalactic Medicine Show. OSC's ezine. $2.50 an issue--an unbelievable bargain.

Congrats again Will. I haven't bought the issue yet, but I plan to soon. I too am anxious to see the finished version.

As for your bio, I'd insert the following into the first line:

William Saxton, a Virigina resident (and known by many as 'that big scary guy), ...
 


Posted by wbriggs (Member # 2267) on :
 
Thanks, everyone! This was a big help. I just sent the bio, and used most of the changes suggested. Now everyone will want to know why I'm big and scary.
 
Posted by Kickle (Member # 1934) on :
 
I missed the title of this post and couldn't figure out what this 13 lines was all about. But I figured it out quick enough, and now I'm off to buy the lastest IGMS.
 
Posted by krazykiter (Member # 3108) on :
 
I went over to IGMS and read the preview of your story, Will. Nifty idea from what I read so far. I busted out laughing after having read the bio here.

I may just pony up some ducats and subscribe.
 


Posted by The Fae-Ray (Member # 3084) on :
 
"Never been the same since" = cliche.
(Also, it seems a little young. I remember writing an autobiography in the first grade and using that term. Mind you, I used it on about every page, but I still used it.)
 
Posted by krazykiter (Member # 3108) on :
 
I bought the issue and read the story - good job, Will.
 


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