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Posted by tchernabyelo (Member # 2651) on :
 
(As a result of discussions in other threads, I have decided to post six openings to stories of mine. Two of these sold to the first market they went to; two sold after garnering rejections; two remain unsold).

Yelto’s fingers scrabbled at the loose earth, and for one moment, just one bright and hopeful moment, he thought he might fall and die. But then he caught hold of a spur of rock, embedded deep enough in the soil to hold his weight; and he hauled himself up and lay, breathing heavily, at the top of the cliff. The air was thick and damp in his lungs. He rolled onto his back and sucked in great draughts of it, as if it were patxo smoke.
But it was not patxo leaves that were burning. It was the village of Duilhac. His home.
“You should not be out of breath from such a climb, little brother,” Riantxa scolded him. He looked up at her, a silhouette against the burning sky.

 




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