I'm not an adult, but I think that you have what my dad (a published but not world famous poet) calls: Potential for being your own kind. if you would try making a poem with 14 lines (forgot what it's called!) then I'm sure you could do great. try not to rhyme too muchor you osund like you are relying upon that alone. even if there is a great rhyme to go with it, change it once in awhile. thanks.
Posted by YBOS (Member # 780) on :
My poems dont usually rhyme... this one just sounded right with the rhyme.. its a fast poem so i think the rhyming makes it easier to read...
Thanx for the oppinion.. Where can i see some of you dads work??