often when I submit my stories to my writers group, one of the consistant complaints is that I am not doing enough description of the characters to satisfy the reader. --- sooooo I started to seriously look at how my favorite authors deal with physically describing the characters, and have come up with a surprising insite. They don't.
with the exception of romances, and even some of those authors don't tend to describe the character from head to toe, but rather they pull out something about the character which if I met them irl, I might notice - or what would come to mind first when describing them to someone else. But there isn't a single character in any of the last 15 or 20 books that I've gone through where I could give a good enough description that the police sketch artist would even be able to get a good enough image to put on the post office wall.
so what is up with this?
I know that part of my writing style is a conglomeration of everything that I have read in the last uggg... 30 years of my life (with the exception of Dr. Suess) so I'm sure that is why I didn't tend to write great detail about how the character looks.
On the other hand, my husband was getting frutrated with Nora Roberts (book on tape) and her love of description so that description scenes and finding out what is going on gets dragged out -- kinda like lots of foreplay. --- but still many of her characterization relys on what characteristics are most noticable, not just any and all.
I've noticed that Rowling does do some of the most indepth character details -- but she tends to work them back into the story somehow.
In contrast, after reading "Friday" last week, I still can't tell you what she actually looks like - or anyone else to any great length. - did I miss something there? I have a feeling for her, and have a general idea, but couldnt' by any means say that she looks like [fill in the blank].
What have others noticed? and how do you deal with this in your writing?
I have sometimes received commments from critiquers saying that I need more physical descriptions of my charactes...not often but someitmes. I ignore them. They are entitled to their opinions, but so am I, and in my opinion they're wrong. Physical description is the least important part of a character.
Now a warning. Is it possible that your character is not well-developed enough in non-physical ways? I've noticed that the times I receive comments on lack of physical description tend to coincide with times when my characterization in general is weak. Perhaps they are focusing on physical appearnce because they have been given nothing at all and as a beauty-centered people the looks are the first thing we think of. (It's just a possibility, not necessarily true. )
It is possible that your readers aren't forming a very good picture of you characters, this is a little different than lack of description. I would try spritsing a few fine details that a casual observer would notice first about the character's appearance into the narrative. "He yelled for the guards, his eyes flashing a dangerous blue." or "It wasn't until I stood next to her in line that I realized how large she was, almost twice as wide as me at the shoulders." What usually happens is that the reader's imagination kicks in and supplies the rest. So while everyone has a differnt picture in their head, certain key details are kept in common.
I just finished Stephen King's "On Writing" and I would recommend reading what he has to say (in the pbk, pgs 170-178 for description, 188-194 for character-building, though there are other pages that also deal with it). He believes that writing is like mental telepathy - from the writer to the reader. You can overdescribe (he has some funny examples) and underdescribe - the trick is finding the happy medium, the few "well-chosen details" that come from your mind, that will help the reader create their own image. He also says that everything depends on the story - but few stories depend on you writing a long section describing the character in complete detail. Don't use physical descriptions as a "shortcut to character" such as "the hero's sharply intelligent blue eyes and outthrust determined chin" which he calls lazy and just bad technique.
So far in short stories, I have sprinkled description in with action:
"He scratched his scalp, which was almost bare of what gray hair was left him."
Then later in the story (two years have passed):
"He grabbed a handkerchief from his pocket to wipe the sweat from his now bald head."
If a character can retrieve a book from a high shelf, we know he is tall, and if he pulls over a ladder, we know he less tall! Of course, if his sword drags on the ground, we might need more - he is either short, or the sword is too long or incorrectly attached to the character...
I think having some physical details included does help - I like to have something to hang my visual images on, but you don't have to paint me the whole portrait. Just throw me some bones - have her twist her long dark hair on top of her head as she comes out of the shower, or shriek as she snaps a perfectly manicured nail (ok, maybe too cliche, but you know what I mean), or sigh as her dress has gotten too tight (yeah, we know, it wasn't the dress that changed sizes). Physical details can serve the story, and maybe should.
Ok, should.
I assume (!) your group has been specific, and has pointed out examples. Have they given suggestions of what they would have like to have seen/read? Whether physical or more character building details? Like Christine said, you have the option to ignore the comments. If they come up with these comments without knowing how the others feel, maybe you could think about adding some details - not enough for that police sketch artist, but enough that each reader can come up with their own visual!
http://www.sfwriter.com/ow12.htm
I like his point about a writer's advantage over a movie director in deciding exactly what is important for the reader to contemplate through precise description.
Brian
It may indicate a deeper problem, as Christine and Jsteg note. But you don't know that it does. Generally, anyone that thinks much physical description of the POV character is necessary or even desirable doesn't have much experience reading good fiction.
You could do as Robert Jordan does and describe the character and their clothing and their horse and his trappings and the weaponry etc... Although in some cases he doen't totally fill you in, but he does have some kind of clothing fetish or something. He must have been a medieval fashion designer in another life.
Protagonist: none at all (if he is present in a scene it is always told from his POV, so providing a description would be difficult).
Protagonist's fiancee: Straight blonde hair that reaches to the middle of her back.
Protagonist's ex-girlfriend: long dark hair, green eyes; in one scene she has acquired a small scar on her face since the protagonist last saw her.
Other characters: one man is noted as being of Japanese origin, which will obviously provide some stereotypical ideas about his appearance.
That's it. I think any more than this is likely to be too much.
thanks for everyones insight. - the people who tend to get on me about my descriptions don't tend to give examples, other than they want more description because they feel they need to know what [insert name] looks like from the very beginning - which actually goes as far as wanting to know the color of the walls (and yes, that was requested by one reader).
Yeah, you seem to get the point. And they seem not to. So I go back to my original advice. Ignore them and continue to only use *relevant* details as authors such as Robert Jordan have failed to do so egregiously.
I mean, though to a point, it is much better to glide through a story than hack and slash through it ...
For example, someone in my writers' group includes far more detailed descriptions of characters and settings than I do in my writing. It is not wrong for her to do so; she is writing romance novels, and from what I understand, part of the expected experience of reading a romance novel is the detailed descriptions that allow the reader to build a sharp mental image of the characters and setting.
Relevancy is not based just on plot considerations. Details may be relevant to setting, to character, to style, to genre, to voice, to pacing, or to any other aspect of writing.
Include as much or as little detail as you think is needed to achieve the effect you desire. Analyze why you want to include details -- as long as you think there's a good reason, the details are relevant.
(Of course, others may disagree on how much detail your story needs. You need to take into account the needs and tastes of your target audience.)
However, I appreciate this discussion, because I can now see how to "sneak in" the descriptions more by using actions. I'm reading HP#1 for our book discussion, and have been saying to myself, "See?! Jo Rowling does it!" But, upon reading your insights here, I realize HOW she sprinkles those descriptions through the plot.
I am humbled and repentant!
Shawn
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LOL--in one novel everyone thought the main character was a woman for several chapters becasue he had long hair. Had to put in a lot of small manly details to fix that.
LoL! Lhat is funny.
though I can see where this could happen. I had a short story with someone waking up from a coma, and the entire scene was from her pov, and there wasn't any convo from her, as she was just waking up. In addition I purposefully didn't use any pronouns - that was hard for me, but I felt that I learned through the writing.
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I can't stand it when I get halfway through a story to find out the main character has blond hair when I've been picturing her as a brunette!
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