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Posted by Pyre Dynasty (Member # 1947) on :
 
"How do you do this?" Pyre asked.

"How do you do this?" Pyre said.

"How do you do this," Pyre asked.


Which one is right? (or if not right which is better?)
 


Posted by Christine (Member # 1646) on :
 
Both of the first two are correct. As to which is better, it depends upon style. I've used both.

[This message has been edited by Christine (edited July 17, 2006).]
 


Posted by kings_falcon (Member # 3261) on :
 
The first two are correct. I tend to like using "said" instead of "asked" because the quote is obviously a question. I also try to use action tags when possible to avoid having to use either X said or X asked.
 
Posted by Robert Nowall (Member # 2764) on :
 
Depends on its location in the story. If it starts a stretch of dialog, the first two are right. But if it's midway into a stretch of dialog, you might omit "Pyre asked / Pyre said" altogether---depending on the circumstances. Like Christine said, it depends on style.

On "better" over "right"...I'd go with "Pyre asked," since Pyre is asking a question. Number Three is definitely incorrect.
 


Posted by rickfisher (Member # 1214) on :
 
I agree: 1 or 2. As for better: for me, definitely 1. When I read
quote:
"How do I do this?" Pyre said.
(or anything similar) it always startles me, in a mild way, to hit that "said"--BECAUSE I know it's a question. It's as if someone came up to me and said, "Let me say a question" instead of "Let me ask a question." It pulls me out of the story (though barely).

Oddly enough, this:

quote:
Pyre said, "How do you do this?"
doesn't bother me the same way. That might just be me.

I also agree that dropping the tag altogether, when appropriate, is best of all.

[This message has been edited by rickfisher (edited July 18, 2006).]
 


Posted by Robert Nowall (Member # 2764) on :
 
Oh, yeah...there's also "'How do I do this?' asked Pyre" school of phrasing.

For some reason, early on in my career as a writer, I took a dislike to writing sentences like that. Seemed an awkward way to say it. (Somehow it reminds me of Yodaspeak...but I think I'd already stopped doing it by the time that movie came out...)

I certainly can't say that I'm right and everybody who does it that way is wrong...it's just a personal preference...
 


Posted by Pyre Dynasty (Member # 1947) on :
 
Thanks everyone, it stops me up everytime I come to a question. This helps immensely.

Pyre.
 


Posted by TMan1969 (Member # 3552) on :
 
I agree with the majority, 1 & 2 sound right - but there is many ways to pose a question.


 




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