A while ago I wrote a story about an alcoholic, he was weak man and I had some reviewers say that they couldn't identify with him...and that he had no redeeming features.
So...a paedophile? I don't want to make him likeable. I am prepared to make human, but can I make people care about the little girl he is with (the victim) instead of him? I planned on making him complex and disturbing...is that an acceptable strategy for keeping readers hooked to an unlikeable protag?
Any other ideas...I can't say too much as I really like my idea.
So instantly loose some of the things that draw a reader to a story, a protagonist that people like and can relate to. Sure, some stories have MC's that aren't likable (like House) but as a reader/viewer you hope, deep down, that the MC is good, and any time they seem good, your heart thrills. Any time a pedophile does something good, it will be tainted by his sins.
The good guy is not the POV character. Is that clearer? The paedophile is the antagonist, yet the story is from his POV.
My mother has worked with paedophiles (as well as other ex-offenders, homeless people and drug addicts) for years, and it's an area where very few know anything at all. Unfortunately, most paedophiles will reoffend, and most are only caught after numerous crimes have already been committed.
It may be an idea to write the story about a man who's been to prison for paedophilia (perhaps downloading porn rather than actually physically abusing someone himself), and finds himself on the outside, battling temptation. I can see how, particularly in a sci-fi/fantasy story, this could work. He could be a thoroughly pathetic, unlikeable character, but he's thrust into the role of hero. I'm thinking of the protag from Carlton Mellick III's 'Sea of the Patchwork Cats', who was an alcoholic, no-good, selfish slob.
It would be harder to pull off for a still-practising paedophile. So it'd be best if he was trying to reform, and suffered from the guilt of his actions. Then he could attempt to redeem himself.
Finally, what if his crime was against someone slightly older (say, 14, rather than 4)? This would make him less immediately repugnant. In fact, there are circumstances where this happens all the time, and there is a big difference between these people and 'real' paedophiles. It's often considered less socially taboo.
Regards
But Lolita would have been a good start for research.
Cheers
You might want to investigate the possibility of making the pedophile someone in position of authority, who is greatly admired and loved - that - contrasted with his horrible sickness, might create an interesting story. Make him a priest, for instance. Of course, that would be a bit cliche as I'm sure that theme has been done to death. It would need a great angle. Whatever you do, I think you will have to change your desired POV for the character.
This is only gonna be a short story. Readers will only have to be in his mind for a short time. But the problem I keep getting is making them want to stay in his mind long enough to get to the GOOD BIT at which point they won't mind watching what happens.
It is a sticky area, but people keep saying stuff I write is cliched (at least a bit -- check my other posts!) so I had this idea which isn't, and want to do it!
In there story there is no sexual content, but there is an abduction, which ends well. So whilst in the mind of the paedophile you experience mostly his anticipation, before it all goes wrong for him.
I think this story could work, and while I doubt you can make a reader sympathize him, you can make the reader feel for him. Write it like you wrote the alcoholic story. Create a man who knows what he does is repulsive and terrible, but is at the same time be drawn to it like the alcoholic to the bottle. Not only will this make the reader bleed for the character, it will create tension in the story as the reader wonders whether the character will gain control of his impulses. That's my opinion anyway.
So . . . there is a point . . . an altered viewpoint could be used by the antagonist through most of the story, for the sake of the reader. Towards the conclusion, the alteration would be revealed to provide the desired gravity to the story. The altered viewpoint could have occurred because of the antag's choice/convenience or mental illness.
As was said previously, there is a cost to what you do. The pedophile POV is a huge cost, one that might be too high.
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feel society is disproportionately reactionary regarding paedophiles...
Funny, my sense of society is that they are disproportionately passive regarding pedophiles.
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Finally, what if his crime was against someone slightly older (say, 14, rather than 4)? This would make him less immediately repugnant. In fact, there are circumstances where this happens all the time, and there is a big difference between these people and 'real' paedophiles.
Baduizt, what planet are YOU from? You say your mom works with pedophiles and thus you seem to have developed some sense of empathy for these folk, but have you ever known someone who was molested as a child? I have, and it isn't pretty.
Survivors of childhood sexual abuse have a suicide rate of about 70%. The act of molesting someone who isn't physically, mentally, or emotionally receptive and prepared for the act is a soul-killer. The damage done by pedophiles and rapists is enormous. You cannot overestimate the absolute sense of annihialation of self this act of violence does.
I have worked in violence prevention myself, and have done my time in the trenches with homeless agencies... (don't confuse the homeless with rapists and molesters, please. Like the vast majority of the population they are most often neither.) I can have empathy with molesters from the standpoint that they have an illness that thus far society and therapists little understand and have little success with.
But never EVER believe that molestation does no damage to a 14 year old, and that someone who molests a 14 year old isn't a real pedophile. There are plenty of adult survivors living broken lives who will tell you different.
Now that I'm done with my tirade, I'll let skadder know my opinion from a writing standpoint. If your purpose is to fulfill an inner itch to write a particular story, then write it, with the protagonist/antagonist cast however you deem necessary. But if your purpose is to ultimately sell stories, you might put your efforts into something else. Publishers aren't often willing to invest in the cost of publishing a book that has a MC whom 99.9% of the population would find abhorant.
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My thought is that I have read stories where the POV is the killer's, and the like, and that seems to work. For my story to work the POV needs to be the paedophile's. I guess the consensus is that it won't work. In which case, I will increase the victims age to 18 so it's a more straightforward. The problem remains...any ideas on how to keep the reader engaged with a POV of someone who is awful?
In your case, I imagine that while I would despise the main character (and I still maintain that it would be a good idea to paint the child abuser as an addict), I could still be compelled to read because I'm worrying about his abductee.
Never, never, fail to be true to the story in fear of offending someone.
As a psychiatric nurse you no doubt know that.
Read J's comments once he got back from the hunt. Who was the prey?
It would be an interesting story from the bear's POV.
I have no doubt J would have killed it if he could.
So why did the bear hesitate? Was it out of charity or fear? Maybe it was laziness? I doubt the bear knows.
BTW
Some use mixed POV to achieve greater contrast.
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For you story, You show how he degrades from liking the look of pretty children, to the point where he becomes excited with them. Since he cannot get close to one on his own, he has to abduct one.
If done right, While he might be the most vile person in existance, but the reader would understand his motivations and possibly feel sorry, when he achieves his final demize, that he suffered the consiquences of a series of minor wrong decisions that could have gone another way so easily.
I wish you luck on writing a powerful piece.
edited to add some missing words in a sentance.
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I'm not saying you would do that, but it will take a lot of care of presentation in not offending or driving away readers. If you can pull it off, it could be an interesting story though.
Edit: Removing edit... too off topic.
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I think the strategy I may to go for is keep the POV as the paedophile's, but keep the penetration light.
I will try to focus the reader's attention on the child's situation.
I may start without explaining the situation so the reader has to guess it's an abduction that is occurring. By the time the reader has guessed the situation I hope they will be involved enough with the girl to want to read to the end, plus by that time they should suspect (because of the use of subtle clues) that the situation may not be quite what the paedophile imagined. At that point I can go deeper into the paedophile's thoughts as he see's it all go horribly wrong for him.
I see this as about 3000 - 4000 words.
Sherrif:
We found the bike.
It leans precariously towards my bed.
It will eventually topple and crush me while I sleep.
I hope my wife survives.
The children will need her.
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However, I have seen a very very powerful movie about a pedophile, told from his perspective, where the story (and hence the viewer) are very sympathetic to him. Do yourself a favor and watch The Woodsman. As abhorrent as the topic is, the movie is moving, powerful, and touching in turns. Roger Ebert had good things to say about it, which led me to watch it when it appeared in a local arthouse theater.
Jayson Merryfield
I think 70% suicide rate might be a bit of a high number. Is that backwards one way or another? Well, it doesn't make sense the other way either. I don't want to minimize the damage that is done, but I don't think exagerrations help either. Many survivors of abuses apparently don't recall what happened.
Maybe. I'm pretty ambivalent on the whole recovered memory movement as well.
P.S. Man without a Face was a book first.
Also, why is there an exclamation point at the end of this thread title?
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quote:I find this comment interesting. What do you mean by many? 1%... 25%... 95%? And where does this information come from?
Many survivors of abuses apparently don't recall what happened.
I have read of cases of children as young as a few days old being sexually abused, so I suppose at least some wouldn't remember. But does the victim not remembering make having been victimized and abused as a child less harmful or less horrendous an act?
Just a few questions and thoughts your comment raised in my mind.
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I have read of cases of children as young as a few days old being sexually abused
Oh my God! I hope not many. That may be the most repulsively barbaric thing I've ever heard of!
Nobody here is suggesting that the writer should try to develop in the reader a tolerance/allowance for the behaviour involved.
There are many acts committed in literature that are utterly abhorrent.
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If readers aren't going to mind watching the paedophile suffer an awful death, then they can't have any sympathy for him. (I'm assuming this is a male paedophile, sorry if that's incorrect.) To me that means that either we have to see him do (or imagine) something vile (no thanks) or he has to be demonized: I think demonization of paedophiles is a cliche which gets in the way of understanding how to deal with them.
If the paedophile is going to suffer an awful death how can we see it if we're in his POV?
If the story proposes that the answer to paedophilia is murder or manslaughter, not justice and treatment, there are moral issues - and this could be cliche.
If the child causes or witnesses his death, one terrible scar (the memory of being molested) is replaced by another, and for me that would still be an unsatisfactory resolution. I doubt I would regard his death as 'the good bit' because I believe in justice, not revenge and lynch law. (If he dies by accident or by his own hand, that might be different.)
If there's no serious attempt to portray the paedophile authentically (which might involve doing some quite nauseous research) the story may appear to be sensationalizing serious issues or capitalizing on other people's pain.
And finally, would it matter if paedophiles enjoyed the story for reasons different from the rest of us?
Pat
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Another angle is to provide a flashback to the antogonist's childhood -- I've read that such folk will perpetuate the abuse that's been done to them (i.e. most abusers were themselves abused). Self-hate, a sense of helplessness as he considers doing harm. That could create some understanding in the reader's mind. Personally I'd rather see him caught or commit suicide than be killed. But hey, its your story.
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And finally, would it matter if paedophiles enjoyed the story for reasons different from the rest of us?
Are you suggesting that the story will attract paedophiles, who will get some enjoyment from the abduction bit...and mentally stick a different ending on it?
Mmmm. Not sure, perhaps it will. Does that mean I shouldn't write it? We often write about killing -- I am sure murderers read these things too. Catcher In The Rye was found in the bedrooms of some famous killers -- or is that an unrban myth?
Re: Two POV's. I can't do the girl's POV for a few reasons -- it has to be his.
Actually, I have just had a thought...I can solve the problem by having the paedophile kidnap TWO girls, and do the POV from one of the girls. I'll have to think on that idea.
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I have read of cases of children as young as a few days old being sexually abused . . .Oh my God! I hope not many. That may be the most repulsively barbaric thing I've ever heard of!
I agree with Zero. In fact, just reading that made me sick. Grrr. . . . I have two babies and just the fact that it is even thinkable to someone, no matter how infrequent the cases of it are, is enough to make me want to lock myself and my kids in the house and not come out.
One way it does this is by classifying his problems as a "physco-sexual disorder", that he is very upset and disgusted by.
Mmmm. Not sure, perhaps it will. Does that mean I shouldn't write it? We often write about killing ..."
Yes, that was the suggestion. No, that does not mean you should not write it, but I do think it's a point worth bearing in mind.
I'm planning to write something soon on cyber-crime, about which I happen to know a thing or two. I'll be careful to only write about things that are either in the public domain or easy to figure out. I shall avoid more arcane ideas because I, personally, would hate for someone to use an original idea of mine in a successful crime. I understand it would be their responsibility not mine, but I'd still feel bad to have put the idea in their head.
Pat
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Tricia V. said: "Many survivors of abuses apparently don't recall what happened."JeanneT said: "I find this comment interesting. What do you mean by many? 1%... 25%... 95%? And where does this information come from?"
The loss of memory experienced by sexual abuse survivors is called Post Traumatic Stress Disorder, or PTSD. PTSD can be experienced by soldiers, cops, traffic crash and accident victims, victims of domestic violence, incest victims. In short, if you've had a horrific experience, and I'm talking a sense of horror that goes beyond the normal fear levels we've all learned to cope with, you may experience PTSD. It is a mental survival tactic to help your mind cope, that is automatic... similar to the rush of adrenaline when we are frightened. Unlike a rush of adrenaline, it does not necessarily go away when the episode is over.
The National Institute of Mental Health has more info.
PTSD is one of those after-shock effects of incest and sexual abuse that can go on for decades after the abuse. I know two women I went to high school, both of whom suffered abuse at home as teens, and neither one of them remember hardly anything about their high school years.
RAINN Network says: "While there are no reliable annual surveys of sexual assaults on children, the Justice Department has estimated that one of six victims are under age 12."
Tricia asked where I got the statistic about 70% suicide rates for incest survivors...I don't own the book, so I can't cite the source. I can tell you I read it in a book written to help abuse survivors when I was trying to educate myself about the issue to help my friend during the darkest times of her therapy. I have no doubt about the rate, because I've seen how deep the wounding is. The number stunned me at the time, which is why I remembered it.
and anyway, when did house abuse anyone? (unless you count his employees, his patients, the patients loved ones, that dumb dog, his boss, and pretty much anyone he meets.)