For instance, in my current novel, characters are smiling, frowning, and giving confused stares... There are only so many words that one can use to note these things. And I don't want to break away from the story to describe someones lips moving in a way that resembles smiling. It seems much clearer to just use the word "smile".
Is it fine to overuse these simple but meaningful words? Or should my characters facial expressions be toned down?
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A while back someone on this site (who may not even frequent hatrack anymore) wrote a simple program that pulled out every word you used in a story, sorted them by frequency, and todd you how often you used it. I thought it was brilliant but unfortunately I can't find it anymore. I was thinking about writing a version myself. But anyway, you look at the most common words and if you're seeing things like the, a, and, or, but, he, she it...you just kind of shrug it off. But if you realize you've used the word cosmopolitan 24 times, you may want to rethink it.
It's a measure of frequency vs. obscurity.
Personally, I dislike it when an author falls back to the same descriptive device. Does everybody's eyes have to twinkle? I remember this being the case when I read Twilight---seemed like every other sentence Edward was "smiling dazzlingly" or giving a "dazzling smile." It makes one groan.
My mistress' eyes are nothing like the sun;
Coral is far more red than her lips' red;
If snow be white, why then her breasts are dun;
If hairs be wires, black wires grow on her head.
I have seen roses damask'd, red and white,
But no such roses see I in her cheeks;
And in some perfumes is there more delight
Than in the breath that from my mistress reeks.
I love to hear her speak, yet well I know
That music hath a far more pleasing sound;
I grant I never saw a goddess go;
My mistress, when she walks, treads on the ground:
And yet, by heaven, I think my love as rare
As any she belied with false compare.
[from http://www.shakespeare-online.com/sonnets/130.html]
A conceit poem. Arguably, in one interpretation, Shakespeare satirized his contemporaries' overused descriptions, overwrought prosody, and sacharine idolatry of their lovers. One of my favorite poems, at least because another interpretation is a metafictive one of the power of words.
100 words and derivatives out of an estimated 600,000 English words account for over 50% of usage. Besides proper nouns, most novels use roughly 2000 different words and derivatives (lemmas). A fifth or sixth grader knows 2,000 to 5,000 words, A high school graduate about 12,000, a college graduate about 17,000.
I have two wordprocessor applications that are able to count and index words by frequency and page number. Both applications call the function conformance. By default, they're set to ignore common words and can be adjusted. One is WordPerfect, the other is Case Catalyst, a stenography application.
Language is sufficiently standardized in most usages that letter and word frequency analyses are a useful tool for deciphering substitution ciphers.
I just went and checked it out again and was unable to get the word list that I had previously gotten. But I did get the list before so it must be do-able.
Too bad you can't just save the graphic, it is cool, but you can take a picture of it to save.
I appreciate it, thanks for the help.
I've just run the latest chapter of my novel through there: the two big ones are the names of my protags. Other than that, these ones seem to be getting a lot of use:
like
thought
know
something
eyes
back
hand
head
face
even
now
'Like' I seem to mostly use as a comparative. 'Thought'... I don't know, I should probably use it less, but it seems so clumsy and artificial to use words like 'wondered', 'contemplated', 'considered', etc.
I find it more useful than a thesaurus because it's structured like a dictionary. IIRC a thesaurus is organized according to concepts.
I think how much overuse is too much is a matter of taste, style and context. In an action scene involving the hero and his Aston, for example, I might refer to it as either the Aston or his car. If there were many references to it as he chases the bad guys, I'd avoid calling it his automobile, his transportation or his machine, because this would attract more attention than several references to the Aston or the car. In an action scene I'd want the reader's attention on the action, not the words.
[Edited to add: For me this is a huge problem. I find myself reusing the same word or phrase all the time--even when writing a post about repetition! "I find" twice in two sentences! Aaaarrrrccggghh!!]
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I've never used Wordle, but the word processing program I use, called yWriter, has its own word usage counter built in. Definitely a handy tool.
I agree with you, TaleSpinner. Sometimes its just silly to avoid a word, if the word fits.
I guess there's no real strict rule of thumb. I'll just have to go with my instincts.
That said, unique words are the ones I think a writer really needs to concern themselves with. If you are the type that falls easily in love with new and unusual words, then use them more than even once in a novel, it will become noticeable. It's even harder if you have a great vocabulary and like to use unusual words in your everyday prose. To you, it seems normal, but to most readers, could well be noticeable, and even worse, annoying.
Kathleen, I think that the overuse of 'big' words, and archaic words, can be quite irritating. I don't think I could ever allow myself to overuse such words. Especially since my writing isn't very large-vocabularied (If I can say it like that...). I like to keep things simple, and use the 'big' words for those moments where I really want to capture something.
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It's a matter of giving the reader the right idea and then backing off instead of cramming it down their throats by repeating it when it's no longer necessary.
I found myself purchasing an Oxford Thesaurus ... and, I whispered, overusing the "I find myself" construction again!
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Having writ what I wrote above, later in the day I found myself visiting a bookshop and found that while Roget's Thesaurus is structured by concepts, there are several that are organized like dictionaries.I found myself purchasing an Oxford Thesaurus ... and, I whispered, overusing the "I find myself" construction again!
Man! You're terrible! Go read a book... about writing!
On a side note: Books about writing, always seemed kind of ironic to me.
Isn't it just too sad?!
But there's an upside. I learn that instead of finding myself, I can now spot, pinpoint, unearth ... sniff out ... light on, hit on, or (literary) descry myself -- but I'm not sure about hitting on myself ...