1) the biological father, Peter, who left when MC was 3 years old
2) the first stepfather, Lee, who MC considers "Dad", MC's father between ages 4-8
3) the second stepfather, Walter, who MC simply calls "Walter."
So, Walter is pretty easy. Whenever my MC refers to him, it's always "Walter." But when it comes to Peter and Lee, I feel like it gets confusing. My MC calls them "Peter" and "Dad" in the narration, even though Peter is the biological father.
I want to stay true to the point of view, but I'm afraid of it being confusing to the normal convention of referring to step-parents by their first names.
Do you guys think this would be an issue throughout the novel—needing to explain more than once that Peter is the biological father and Dad is the stepfather—or do you think it's fine if it's explained once and I let my readers remember the details of paternity on their own?
Thanks!
I think if you find it confusing, then chances are the reader will too. It's probably best to err on the side of clarity.
Edited to add: nothing wrong with Shimiqua's recommendation. Adding internal thoughts for clarity may help as well.
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But I think if you want to keep him Peter, that's fine too, and I don't think people should get too confused. It will be in context of something, so as long as his name doesn't just spring up from no where, there should be no problem.
Melanie
The 'birth dad', that mrmeadors suggested, would be good for reference. As for a name, my dad didn't show up much for about twelve or thirteen years, so I called him by his first name when he finally appeared. You see, if you're twelve years old and you've gone your whole life calling somebody else (or nobody) 'Dad', it becomes very awkward to suddenly give somebody that title, especially if you feel they haven't 'earned' it. Either way, I believe these emotions and thoughts should be conveyed in your story.
A few things.
First, change either Peter or Walter to something with a different ending. Pete or Walt would work find. Peter and Walter rhyme, and keeping the names different will help. Minimally.
The biggest thing to ask is why you need three father figures. What does each one offer/represent to your MC. If you can answer this question -- and each offers him something DISTINCT -- then no problem. But if they're overlapping, cut one.
Finally, your MC will THINK and FEEL differently about these characters. If you develop thought and emotional tags for each (MC always gets butterflies when Walt is around b/c of Walt's temper -- that sort of thing), then it will be much easier for both you and the reader. But remember, MC can't get butterflies anywhere else.
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As for me, I work with children (and at times, adults) who have had much worse childhood's than my own - it is important to put all things into perspective.
@mrmeadows
Thanks for giving a real world example I wasn't sure if "birth dad" would be something a kid would naturally call their biological father, so that's good input!
@shimqua
I like your idea, of coming up with a nickname. Hehe, bio-dad.
@Jeff Ambrose
Yeah, when I was picking names I was annoyed, at first, about the repetition of "ter" at the end of both the names. I've read OSC's writing lesson on naming just like everyone else here probably has. But it was one of those things where I kept trying other names and none of them "fit." Peter is a Peter. Walter is a Walter. It's hard to explain. Also yeah, I need all 3, or I would have axed one of them long ago.
@wetwilly
Thanks for your input