I’m in middle management. I love the term “middle management”. What does that mean, anyway? My wife is amazed that I can spend the better part of an hour trying to decide the best bolts to buy at the home improvement warehouse.
The overall tone is somewhat sarcastic. While I realize this is the lowest form of wit...it's all I've got.
What are you intended to do with this story? 25K words is very uncomfortably placed in commercial terms; novellas are notoriously hard to sell.
Comedy is very subjective, which makes hitting an editor’s eye very hit-and-miss. It is also non-fiction comedy, which is harder to sell without an existing audience (i.e. Jerry Seinfield can sell a book answering rhetorical questions, but can Joe Bloggs?)
Given all this, it might be easier to critique if we have some idea of what you want to do with it and why.
The audience would be 25 - 30 and older. It would have particular appeal to individuals who have entered the computer age (even reluctantly), especially those that work within professional office settings. It would also appeal to parents with young children. Basically, it’s a poke at life experiences.
I’m no expert on non-fiction (or fiction for that matter), but I gain the impression platform is very important in any kind of non-fiction. From what I can tell about “Letters from a Nut” (I haven’t read it) is that it has two advantages; a platform through the endorsement of Jerry Seinfield (the introduction is a very strong platform, moreso than a mere cover blurb) and a central concept with a great deal of selling power (poking fun at humorless corporate and government culture in a clear and easily understandable way).
If you don’t have a pre-existing platform, can you sell the concept? And can you re-write it with structure? I’ve read that the articles editor in the New Yorker strongly prefers pieces that have a beginning, middle and end rather than just a list. I’ve also read advice from the book editors at Random House that it’s very hard to place humor that is just humour; in other words, they want themes and structure to the humor.
If the book is just your observations about the world, perhaps it would be better to pace and structure it.
I’m a bit reluctant to take on more critiquing work for people I don’t know at the moment. Humor is also a bit dangerous to critique; sometimes all you can say is “I didn’t laugh” rather than offering clear technical reasons why you didn’t laugh.
Regards,
Nick
I welcome any and all advice from humor aficionados or people who are just bored... Thanks, folks!
I noticed something, if your intention is sarcastic wit that is fine, but you need people to laugh. Take the last line:
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I’m in middle management. I love the term “middle management”. What does that mean, anyway? My wife is amazed that I can spend the better part of an hour trying to decide the best bolts to buy at the home improvement warehouse.
You are talking about middle management, in which most of the time nothing is really ever accomplished. Right? So why are you talking about your wife? That seems to through the rhythm off a bit here. what if your were to reword the punch line something like this:
What does that mean, anyway? It means that I can spend the better part of an hour trying to decide the best bolts to buy at the home improvement warehouse.
Something like this would reference what middle management is like without saying it.
You just need to keep the funny side open with each sarcastic or negative comment or question. The idea is that you are turning all frustrations around in a funny way. I think you are off to a good start.
Mike
[This message has been edited by macmicool (edited June 11, 2010).]