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Author Topic:   Published first 13 analysis - Ashwin's Rules from Hemisphere's Magazine
KayTi
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posted August 02, 2007 12:48 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for KayTi     Edit/Delete Message
This is from the United Airlines in-flight magazine from sometime earlier this year (apparently they don't put a date on their pages!)

It's a work of short fiction (not sure length - my guess is 2000-3000 words?) by Tricia Dower

The story really struck my husband, who tore (oh the horrors!) it out of the magazine to bring home to me. This is notable. He brings me an occasional article from a newspaper or news-related magazine (typically on a technology topic or one related to my non-for-profit work) but a whole STORY. My husband read a work of short fiction? But anyway, that's the lead-in, it really resonated with someone who would not normally read short fiction.

Here are the first 13:
Ashwin's Rules
On a breeze September afternoon, Ashwin Kapoor burst into an odorous, noisy, brightly lit world. He bore Leena's milky-tea complexion and sleepy eyes. From Prem, he took his melon-shaped head and wiry frame. He felt arms, legs, fingers and toes growing, as a tree senses its roots burrowing into the earth. He heard the whoosh of more than a thousand enzymes racing through his cells. Power seemed to radiate from his pores, reaching out to all else that lived.

Leena and Prem appeared to him, even then, as disconnections of motion, noise, touch, and smell: the scratch of starched cotton, the whispery blur of silk, the pinch of incense. They sailed him around their small rooms in Toronto's Little India, pointing at shapes. "Ganesha," they said, pulling his fingers...

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Interestingly, as I re-read the story beginning, I realized that the story gave me a misconception from the start. My interpretation of the story is that it's about the world according to an autistic or otherwise handicapped boy. It's a really interesting study in what his impressions must be. However, from the first 13, I got the distinct impression that this was a work of speculative fiction - that the boy had superpowers of some sort, to be able to feel the rush of enzymes and feeling his limbs growing.

This is not something that the author maintains throughout the story, but rather just helps set the stage for the unusual point of view, which is limited to the child's POV but omniscient in many ways since there are things explained that I suspect a child with the kinds of disabilities depicted wouldn't be able to understand or interpret.

At any rate, I suspect this isn't all that interesting if you haven't read the rest of this story...and I was going to end it there, but through the wonders that the Internet provides - here's a link to the story!
http://www.hemispheresmagazine.com/may07/ashwin.html

Aww...I forgot the story made me cry. Sniff sniff. This parenting thing just makes me a basket case for mother-love stories.

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LordPoochie
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posted August 23, 2007 10:02 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for LordPoochie   Click Here to Email LordPoochie     Edit/Delete Message
I haven't read the rest of the story, but from the first thirteen I got a very different impression. It definitely seemed to be describing Ashwin's birth.

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HuntGod
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posted August 23, 2007 10:25 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for HuntGod   Click Here to Email HuntGod     Edit/Delete Message
Yup, said birth to me as well...

Was engagingly written though, not sure if the voice of the piece would hold me for long though.

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TDower
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posted October 06, 2009 01:29 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for TDower   Click Here to Email TDower     Edit/Delete Message
I realize this discussion is two years old but I've just recently discovered it. My name is Tricia Dower and I'm the author of "Ashwin's Rules." Thank you all for your kind comments. If you have any questions about the story, I'll be pleased to answer them.

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Corky
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posted October 06, 2009 04:08 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for Corky   Click Here to Email Corky     Edit/Delete Message
Cool! I have a question for you, Tricia.

How did you sell your story to an inflight magazine?

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KayTi
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posted October 06, 2009 11:52 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for KayTi     Edit/Delete Message
Oh my gosh, Tricia, I am so thrilled that you posted!

I am thrilled for two reasons.

The main reason I'm thrilled is that I had completely forgotten about this thread. I was recently disappointed when I couldn't remember enough about this story's title or date to be able to find it online in a search (I think I tried airline magazine archives, but they weren't sorted in a way that I could usefully search.)

The second reason, though, is that I'm so glad that you posted (and relieved that I didn't sound too ridiculous in my 2 year old post!) Your story is still with me, and I still think of it often, even though parenting a child with autism/mental handicaps is not something I have experience with.

As writers, so often we send our work out into the wind and just hope that we can have an impact on someone, somehow (even if it's just the slush pile editor to pass it up the food chain!) My 8 year old son told me tonight that sometimes he gets worried when he's writing something, that he doesn't want to share it. When I asked more about why, he said because he was worried that people would laugh. Oh my little old soul! He hit right to the heart of what keeps some of us from submitting our work out into the big, bad world.

I would love any suggestions you have on submitting, particularly to a market like Hemispheres Magazine.

I'm sure once I get over my excitement at your post, I will have more questions. I also hope you'll consider poking around here at Hatrack. While there's a heavy leaning toward speculative fiction, there's a wide range of tastes and styles, as well as skill levels from new to the craft to those who've had many works published, and much range in between.

And I hope you can take as a deep compliment the fact that my husband defaced a magazine to share your story with me, quite a statement!

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KayTi
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posted October 06, 2009 11:55 PM     Click Here to See the Profile for KayTi     Edit/Delete Message
One quick question for you, Tricia - the link to Hemispheres doesn't seem to have a copy of the story up any longer. Is there somewhere else online that this story is available? I'd love to read it again (and be able to share it with whomever it was I was hoping to share it with a month or two ago!)

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philocinemas
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posted October 07, 2009 08:12 AM     Click Here to See the Profile for philocinemas   Click Here to Email philocinemas     Edit/Delete Message
I'd be interested in reading it as well - the opening had me hooked, and I have worked in the past with children with autism.

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