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Tim Young Member |
Thought I'd find out what folks around here think about this piece. Here's the first 13: The Wangsgards at Five Points in Ogden was a supermarket and an Ace Hardware Store. To my ten-year-old self the store's decor seemed really old-school. I accepted this as more or less normal, since it didn't seem much different than most of the other discount grocery stores where I lived. Sometime around when I turned 10 my mom started letting me walk the mile or so from our house to the Wangsgards. Around that same she and my dad also gave in to my continual requests to let me spend my allowance on a slingshot. The slingshot I wanted was a thing of beauty. It had a molded-plastic pistol grip and a forearm brace that let you pull back with as much force as you could muster. The day I bought it I agonized over whether to buy the small BBs or the big ones. The [This message has been edited by Kathleen Dalton Woodbury (edited April 23, 2009).] IP: Logged |
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mikemunsil Member |
This is creative nonfiction. As such you might consider using some of the techniques of short fiction to engage the reader's attention right off the bat. Your first several paragraphs are setting the stage by providing background information. That is fine in a novel or longer piece, as the reader expects to read for a few pages just to get into things, but it can put off the reader in a shorter piece. The piece is memorable to you, memorable enough to write about, so why not start out right in the middle of what makes it so memorable? Hope this helps. IP: Logged |
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