well I finally got round to doing the rewrite. Any takers?
quote: Shan knew he should have left her there in the wreckage of the carriage. He should have turned away and kept on walking and would never have become involved in the vagaries of the Holters’ world.
But Shan’ith Al-Fallion was not someone who could abandon a soul in trouble. Evidence was given in the form of the once starving wolf cub now grown into the silver beast padding at his side. Her breath misted the air, and she nuzzled his hand in an effort to distract him from the shattered contraption of men.
"Hush Anala," he said. "I’ll just take a look. That’s all."
They were all dead but for the girl and she wouldn’t be long in joining them. He could already see the marks of the Snow Child in her skin. The body of an older woman had been thrown over her, pinning her down. This one was dead, her neck twisted at an unnatural angle.
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