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...would anyone be willing to take a look at it for me? It's so old I'd forgotten it existed, but a fresh read didn't make me gag.
Length:It's VERY short--only 150 words Title: Generations Genre: I suppose you'd call it urban fantasy
I'll only give you the first four lines to tantalize...
quote:Whirrrrr, clunk, click, hiss.
Grady picked up the copy as it slid out of the machine. Better. Dimmer. Threadier. Almost to that substanceless spiderweb kind of look that copies get as you wander further and further from the original, like blue veins under thin skin.
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I really like the language and the pacing of your teaser. I'll look at it. wolf_dude64@yahoo.com
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I'll look, but I agree about "substanceless" and "threadier". You can probably just replace "substanceless" with "ephemeral". You can do the same using "gossamer" instead of "threadier", though it isn't a comparative.