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Ellen and my unborn son had been dead for nearly six hours.

I stood staring at her naked, motionless body. She was locked in a stasis chamber. Her pregnant belly distended awkwardly from her otherwise slender body. The peaceful expression on her face showed no sign of her unfortunate condition.

I heard the sound of the hospital room door opening and knew that the doctor was ready for me.

I leaned close over the glass enclosure that held her and whispered, “I’m sorry. I love you.”

There were tears in my eyes when I turned to meet the knowing gaze of Dr. Tucker. She offered me a half-smile and motioned for me to mount the gurney. The nurse looked away when I caught her misty eyed glance.

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This story uses a device I've seen used successfully where the initial opening is actually the ending and then the rest of the story tells how the protag got to that point.

I like the story but I'm curious how well I've implemented the device as well as the first person PoV (this is my first).

Thanks for reading.

Send it through if you're willing. I'll take a few days.

Regards,

Thanks!