2 things I think that are taking away from the otherwise excellent writing:

"His vehicle weaved with the pavement around seemingly leafless oaks that stood like giant gate keepers." took me a couple of reads to understand what was being said here. I'd suggest clarifying a bit more if possible. I think the problem comes from the word seemingly; it tends to run with the beginning of the sentence and is saying the pavement weaved around seemingly, which I couldnt understand at first, but then realized it was seemingly leafless oaks. In short, If you lost the seemingly i would have not been confused... Keep in mind I'm rather simple minded. HA HA

Also, I found your last sentence weak in comparison the the rest of the writing. I feel like its almost a cope out to explain why Frank is on this road. He just felt like reconnecting so he's driving up to his dad's house? I think there is more there. This line doesn't need to be squeezed into this first thirteen. I already know there is tension between the father and son, and I already know he is driving up the driveway to the house.

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His bones jarred with every pothole he hit; his negligence to replace the car's shocks and his father’s negligence to fill in these catastrophic holes joined together in a physically painful ride paired with memories of the past.

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What dilluted some of my intrigue was that you referred to Frank's situation with his father twice within the space of the next three sentences. The last ("Out of some minute desire...") is obviously important, so I would challenge you to consider the existence of "Frank remembered the years he spent here being ignored and shut out of his Dad’s life" as it currently reads. Just a personal preference on my part. No biggie.

I'll read the story. Send it my way, per favore.

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