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franc li
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Right elbow in left hand
Chin between right thumb and forefinger
One eyebrow raised.

Or do you just say "I eyed him with suspicion."


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wbriggs
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I put my chin on my hand, and raised an eyebrow.

I rubbed my chin. (More an expression of thought than suspicion.)

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"My suspicion must have been obvious from my stance; he put his hands up in quick defense.

'You've got it all wrong,' he said."


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Calligrapher
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I struggle with this myself. To "Show" or to "Tell" is the question. If you show too much, then you have painted a mental picture that you expect the reader to visualize exactly the same way as you have. If you show a little and tell a little, then the reader has the leeway to visualize a personalized version of a picture you have merely suggested.
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He stood like Truman Capote.
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If you are in first person, "I looked upon him with suspicion" or something that simple.

If you are in third person, Limited and its your PoV character: Stroking his chin, he eyed them with suspicion.

If you are in third person limited and the character is not your Pov Character ; John held his chin with his hand and looked upon Mike with a slight squint to his eye.


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"I could not cross my arms for it might appear haughty and possibly invoke his wrath. So I aborted the motion in midair and sought to brace my elbow in a protective hand, hoping to seem thoughtful as I pondered his question.

His stare continued, so to hide my telltale tremor as well as to appear more harmless, I cupped my chin into my gun hand, raising a quizzical eyebrow. He tightened his grimace so I knew he misinterpreted my stance as one of suspicion rather than overt aggression."

Too wordy.

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