Because I'm doing W1S1 I submitted a flash story to an Amateur contest where writers are invited to write a story about this Artists bi-weekly painting. The prize: The original sketch. He posted his comments on different stories. This was mine. Needless to say I didn't win, but his comment cracks me up.
"I’m not really sure if I completely understand “A PAINTING WORTH A THOUSAND WORDS” by William Knight. His story had a bit of “Waiting for Godot” surrealism that alternated between a fantasy and exaggerated reality. Slightly hard to follow I think that the story had an angry tone, was it possibly meant to be a bit of an oblique insult at this project? I’m not sure whether to be flattered or weirded out by his use of my name throughout. The paradox of the pretty girl against the reality that can make her not so attractive is really explored by a couple of the authors."
I love his comment. I hate being normal. I'd rather stand out than be considered boring. It means I'm on the right track with my writing with plenty of room to grow. And I did kind of take a dig at the contest so I don't really deserve to win.
Mine is called: A painting worth a thousand words - It's the third story down. I use the pen name: William Knight.
PS: I really doubt now that I'm going to win for my story: Transparent Intentions for his contest called: Hope Ferterbest - that I submitted a few days ago. If he didn't like my first I doubt he'll like that one.
You can find it here. Its the second story in comments. [URL=http://kenney-mencher.blogspot.com/2011/01/write-story-about-hope-ferterbest-and.html]http://kenney-mencher.blogspot.com/2011/01/write-story-about-hope-ferterbest-and.html[/UR L]
May I suggest you look at proof-reading your work? In the second sentence you have "use to" instead of "used to", "walk on rolls" for "walk-on roles", and "a verity of make believe worlds" (where I think you might mean "a veritable plethora of make-believe worlds", but I can't be sure).
This is the sort of thing that editors really do take notice of; a couple of mistakes like this early in a piece is all the excuse many overworked editors need to just put one manuscript aside and start on the next.
So I looked at the website out of curiosity last night. And this morning I wrote down a story that popped into my head.
Is this worth taking seriously at all? I know it's not paid, and I'm kind of lost by all the posted legalease. And yet I've got 900 words that I don't know what to do with if not submit it. (I'm a submission chicken - only two things submitted last year). Is there somewhere better to submit a WWII vignette? Any advice?
Like I said I still have a long way to go, but as KDW has said to many others here, just the act of getting something out teaches you a lot. I'm constantly working on my vocab, but it will be years before I have all the little details memorized. My vocab is already far better than it ever was, but still lacks the significant volume and understanding of a seasoned writer. Punctuation and grammar, slowly little by little, with repetition, it will slowly sink in.
But thanks for the notes.
Rox - I didn't take the contest very serious. I was just under deadline to submit something before the week was out for W1S1. If you're worried about legal I believe there is a note, that you can send him whatever contract you wish and he'll review it.
I got an e-mail from him just a little while ago, and even though I didn't win he still wanted to send me a sketch for my work. So in a sense I still won.
In doing the W1S1 I've noticed quite a lot of people want submissions on Duotrope for no pay or if lucky 1 cent per word. For me I'm just trying to get a few stories out of the computer and into the world. I already have started to notice that just the effort in pushing myself makes me feel better about writing.
Thanks again Tch - For bigger stories to professional markets I'll be begging here for proof readers. Till then I'll keep working on my skills.
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Please don't be offended by this: I used to tell people that worked for me (some who had masters degrees), who had to write clinical notes about clients, that the little green, blue, and red lines in MS Word documents weren't there for decoration. I was able to deliver that comment in a nonthreatening manner that generally received laughter.
In fiction, these lines are less important because fiction breaks many grammar rules. However, I always try to at least find out what the Word is trying to tell me, then I make a decision as to whether to ignore it or not. Just a consideration.
That's ironic, I always have them - and grammar is one of my strong suits. Give me a day or so and I will give you some generalized grammar rules to go by. I am currently sick and I took some NyQuil about twenty minutes ago, so I am quickly fading...
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I'll give the grammar thing a go - at least my understanding of it.
Hyphenated words that consist of a verb + preposition (i.e. walk-in, walk-on) typically take on the function of an adjective. Such as: Hitchcock often had walk-on roles in his own movies. Or: The master suite has a walk-in closet. These are different from compound words, such as "t-shirt" or "high school," which are hyphenated or unhyphenated depending on what the dictionary tells me
"Is something the matter?" vs "Is some thing the matter?" reminds me of the saying :
quote: What is matter? Never mind. What is mind? Never matter.
The exact rules of grammar as to why they are different eludes me at the moment. Never mind - adverb+noun vs nevermind - noun. Something like that. Philocinemas, hope you feel better soon so you can explain it to us