So thanks to the comments on my last post I got the message that I needed a more active beginning. Let me know if this is better, and also I need some readers - just for the prologue and first chapter. I'd be happy to return the favor. Thanks!
Cailun glowered down at the finery from the shadows, anxious. Where was that pretender? Having trailed the self-proclaimed 'Prince' for weeks, Cailun hadn't gotten close enough yet to report on the boy's real intentions.
He peered intently over the stone terrace railing which rose above the great hall. The chamber floor below moved in lively color as the local gentry fluttered about, their gossiping tongues alive with speculation.
Surely, he wouldn’t cancel another appearance. No, he couldn’t and maintain the support of the Lords. He would have to speak. Unfortunately for the 'Prince', the Lords weren’t his only problem tonight.
Cailun smirked as he thought on how easily it had been to
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