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Don't be shy about posting(although I still get that way too) Bottom line is we are all here to help each other and learn. The more active we stay the better off we all are.

And, most important, please remember anything anyone says, is their opinion, and nothing more. Some are published in small ways, others in big ways. And some not at all.

My first thought was CRUNCH and tortured noise didnt ring as the same sound.

My second thought is we are going for Wilahm's pov, or point of view. If so, the second sentence, the young man's head... seemed like someone elses pov. I would suggest....sounded behind Wilahm. He jerked his head up...

My third thought--waking up or a dream is a rather cliched place to start. I dont mind it, it can be pulled off. Just make sure you feel its perfect and necessary.

Fourth thought, Looking around - this isnt necessary if we are strong in his pov. you can leave that out and have it. The meadow...

Fifth thought, "was" was tends to lead to less active writing. I try to limit them. Example. The sun was shining. versus --The sun shone down.

I am reposting your intro with my thoughts, just so you can see what I am trying to get at. I sometimes struggle finding the words.

INSERT WORD, a tortured noise sounded behind Wilahm. His head jerked up from where it was pillowed on his pack and he drew in a startled breath. He frequently came to this meadow to daydream. Today it seemed he had unknowingly progressed into a real dream. He struggled to remove the remnants of sleep from his mind. Slanting sunlight still filled the meadow, though the shadows of evening sought to claim the edge of the forest behind him.

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Right now I'm stuck on a crossroads in my story. Do I let my character know all of the facts right up front, or do I let him find out on his own later on. I've written it both ways and can't move forward until I decide which is stronger.
Any thoughts anybody?

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All we can give you is general advice at this point.

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Right now I'm stuck on a crossroads in my story. Do I let my character know all of the facts right up front, or do I let him find out on his own later on. I've written it both ways and can't move forward until I decide which is stronger.
Any thoughts anybody?

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First I would agree with Meredith. Allowing the character to learn the facts as he/she goes adds mystery and suspense to the story.

The question I would ask is: What difference does it make if he/she knows the facts? Will they act differently? Will their goals change? Their motivation? Ex. If I am after the answer to my mothers death, and I dont know the reasons, I have to search for it then decide what to do with my data. If I know my mother was murdered, then I just have to decide should I seek revenge and kill them or what. The same end result maybe, but two entirely different ways of getting there. Does that make any sense?

The story isnt just about things happening, but more importantly about the changes the MC will face and overcome, the internal stuff. Just think long and hard on what would make the best story, the most conflict and go from there.