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Drifts into a dream where he's in a Chinese restaurant -- but he's not. Blinks hard, rubs fists into his eyes like a little kid. He goes, "Unh.""Tommy," _____
And then he's on a boat,
(Tommy Tommy T --)
touching the belly of a girl in a blue bikini. She looks down at him and smiles. She pulls on his hair with her fingers -- not hard. Affectionately. She's a blonde, this girl. Sunlight shines on her shoulders, accentuates the shape of bones beneath her skin. He puts his face against her belly.
This is nice. I love your clavicle.
"-- ommy wake up, you stupid bastard."
The dropped pronouns in the opening two sentences grated a little for me (like, why drop the first two but not the third) but then again, I think it got my attention.