Here's another apocalypse story (sorry, Meredith!), one I finished a while ago. It's only 2947 words long, and I need some readers. I'd be happy to reciprocate!
I signed up for the class because my girlfriend thought it would be fun. Guns, roughing it, killing squirrels for dinner - Kayla loved that crap, in theory at least. Survival courses had become a favorite diversion for dilettantes like her and conspiracy theorists like me. I doubt that many students really believed doom was power walking towards us with hand-weights of destruction. After all, deterioration had been the natural state of things for a long time. Famine, plague, floods, earthquakes? Been going on for years. War and rumors of war? Check. World economy in the toilet? Old news.
By the time I got to class that first night, the room was filled with neophytes ready to learn the intricacies of digging latrines and twisting the heads off chickens. A middle-aged
[ March 12, 2012, 11:45 AM: Message edited by: Kathleen Dalton Woodbury ]
Posted by LDWriter2 (Member # 9148) on :
Interesting.
The title caught my attention so I read it.
Not bad, first two sentences are grabbers. But that "hand-weights of destruction " makes me think me of the gym. Maybe something along the lines of brass knuckles or steel gloves?
One sentence seems a bit long on second reading but I think they all read well at least with their lengths.
Not much else I can say.
Louis
Actually this is third one dealing with an apocalypse, seems to be a rage going on.
Posted by Denevius (Member # 9682) on :
hello. i'm game to swap with you if you're interested. just send it along to my email.
Posted by rcmann (Member # 9757) on :
I'll read it, send it over.
Posted by A Yeatts (Member # 9500) on :
I'd be happy to read. Very intrigued so far. I think it was the head twisting chicken bit...
Anna
Posted by wirelesslibrarian (Member # 9513) on :
Thanks so much, Denevius, RC, and Anna. I just sent you my story.
Posted by Geoff Hawthorne (Member # 9772) on :
I'd like to read it, please! The entire hand-weights of destruction line was my favorite, and I already like the premise of the story.
Posted by C@R3Y (Member # 9669) on :
Send it along. This hooks me. Good character development. I was lost inside the first thirteen, the good kind of "lost", mind you. x]